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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
you've peeked my interest... I want more. You're last story was really good and ironically enough I was reading it when I came across this today. I'd love to see where this story might go.
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm really interested in this story, please write more. :)
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
well...here'sa big basket of chocolate covered feedback for you! delightful start and hope the plot bunnies are bouncing all over your keyboard! ( and not leaving poopies behind.....)
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like the way you started this story... very cannon descriptions of the characters. Especially Ron's reaction.
It would be easier to read the story if there was more space between paragraphs. And since it is a "working title" I think you should stress on what kind of debt it is... because its not exactly a Blood Oath... no oath was made and no blood was shed. More like a promise or a vow... and also, depending on what he is going to ask for.
Anywho, wonderful storyline, I can't wait for more. And the grammar = awesome.
It would be easier to read the story if there was more space between paragraphs. And since it is a "working title" I think you should stress on what kind of debt it is... because its not exactly a Blood Oath... no oath was made and no blood was shed. More like a promise or a vow... and also, depending on what he is going to ask for.
Anywho, wonderful storyline, I can't wait for more. And the grammar = awesome.
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this so far. And I can't wait to see where you take it. Hope you update soon!
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very nice start! Is this going to be a MLC-fic? I love those! Anyhow, I will be watching out for updates :)
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm really liking the story so far. I think that it's a really interesting plot so far. I can't wait to find out what his favor is going to be!
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like your story. keep going.
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
more please
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Like it a lot so far! Can