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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi Neelix,
just read this through in one hit (!)
I like the premise and your writing, of course. Your original character and her methods were terrific and very intriguing. Thoughts/feelings do shape the reality, don't they?
There are a couple of plot points that feel jarring (but that's not a big deal), but apart from that, it's a very enjoyable read. I love your style; it's very creative.
just read this through in one hit (!)
I like the premise and your writing, of course. Your original character and her methods were terrific and very intriguing. Thoughts/feelings do shape the reality, don't they?
There are a couple of plot points that feel jarring (but that's not a big deal), but apart from that, it's a very enjoyable read. I love your style; it's very creative.
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I LOVED 19. It was fun, fun. The bare arse was hysterical. And the way you got him to say the dreaded phrase was brilliant. Clever and realistic. YaY.
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I LOVED 19. It was fun, fun. The bare arse was hysterical. And the way you got him to say the dreaded phrase was brilliant. Clever and realistic. YaY.
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Please update soon.
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thank the gods. We are finally getting somewhere. I love that Severus is misunderstanding the words and actions that Hermione is sending. Unintentionally Hermione forgets that Severus has never had these feeling before and, even though he is looking for a lifetime comitment he is emotionally immature. I loved this chapter the most so far because you could smell the fustration and rejection a mile away. Well written!!! Can't wait for the update.
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I just love this story. I've been enjoying the slow build-up, the tension, the flow of it all. You write beatifully, and while your work is easy to read, it is by no means simplistic. It takes real talent to achieve that, which I believe you have. Thanks for sharing, and I look forward to reading the next chapters!
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Severus!
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow just when I thought I knew where this was going you throw me of track. I thought for sure Severus would just give in and let Hermione in. However, Severus being who he is has to be hard headed and garded. I guess there is going to be a bit of drama coming up as far as Hermione is concerened. Great job I just love your wriring as usual. Looking forward to the next update.
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Severus is right! And poor Hermione too. Kudos to our girl for holding onto her values and not giving in (even if she does eventually). This is a lovely story and I am enjoying it thoroughly! Keep up the good work!
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh man...men. Enjoyable, thank you for the udpate!