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June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i like can't wait for more
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June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
At the Harry Potter Lexicon http://www.hp-lexicon.info/wizards/granger.html both of Hermione
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June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Excellent. I am glad that you re-wrote chapter two. I think this is much better. I can't wait to read more to see how her father reacts to the news and also to see what happens when Severus finds out. As for the names of Hermione's parents, I don't think they were ever mentioned by name. So anything would work.
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June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think its Hugo but not entirely sure xx
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June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like the premise..of course i love snape anyway. But it's moving too fast for me. Also Snape is very out of character. OOC isn't a problem for me, but this like a 180 degree difference in him. Also, I think a beta would help wit the spelling and grammatical errors. Don't get me wrong, I do like the story, but the OOC Snape is a little off-putting.
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June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The plot has a lot of potential, but the writing is choppy and disjointed, the sentences don't flow into each other; and I feel you are lacking in description.
Perhaps invest in a beta to catch the technical errors and to assist you with improving this story so it can achieve it's full potential.
Perhaps invest in a beta to catch the technical errors and to assist you with improving this story so it can achieve it's full potential.
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June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is a wonderful story. I look forward to reading more soon.
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June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OK hon, gonna have to agree with the first two reviews on this one. Great premise but the sentences are choppy....they are more like random thoughts than actual sentences, there is no flow to them. I think the story has potential but you might consider a beta and perhaps slowing down a bit to give the story the chance to unfold at an easier pace to read.
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June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Update Soon!