AFF Fiction Portal
schedule August 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very good start so far. I've really enjoyed reading it. Hope to read more soon. Update quickly please!
person Anon
schedule July 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm afraid its a rather mediocre story.
the storytelling is neither exciting nor believable.
Try reading some more english and that might help you improve your writing.
also, it's Alastor, not alistiar.
schedule June 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow that was great ...please please update soon .. later for now

angel
schedule June 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
im liking where this story is going =]

please continue
person tommye
schedule June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm interested to read more. sounds like this fics going somewhere. good so far. keep it up.
schedule May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Reviewed....there's not enough of the story yet to really have any criticism, good or bad. So far, you've gone off on a tangent from book 5, and left it as a cliffhanger. I neither like nor dislike it. I'm curious, but will need more to make a qualified judgment of your writing.