schedule
June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really liked how Hugo got his name in this fic! Um I'm really bad at languages...if I may can I ask what Les Mis
schedule
June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Why is Severus so incredibly spineless and easily manipulated? Hell, why did HE talk Granger out of having the mark placed elsewhere: a huge brand on his forehead, never to be erased?! Because that was him, who derailed her efforts, not psycho!Potter.
The man who goes berserk when humiliated canonically, decides to go out in public with his abuser wearing that thing?! Voluntarily? Sorry, no. Perhaps after years of isolation and brainwashing but this isn't what happened here, isn't it. For him there hasn't been much time gone and he just arrived at Potters a few days (1?) ago.
And the "oh, I'm soooo hungry"-thing, after not even a single day?! Makes his earlier defiance look completely ridiculous. And I wonder how he'd survive days and weeks without food, which is after all perfectly possible physically. Clearly not this guy though....
Why does he internalize Potter's less than subtle tactics within hours? He's been menaced and manipulated by better and much cleverer people. Even if he does feel tremendous self-loathing: after just a few hours he already *shows* Potter his true feelings and weaknesses?! Serves them up on a silver platter? That's pathetically spineless and moronic. Why doesn't he express his feelings in the (for now) safe privacy of his own mind or better repress them. He gives Potter attack point after attack point with little to no effort from that side.
And so stupid?! He has no illusions about Harry's sanity and sadism, you made that clear. So EVERYTHING he takes away from Spinner's End, EVERYTHING that has value for him, sentimental or material, is GUARANTEED to become either a hostage or a torture instrument for Potter to use against him whenever he feels like it!
Someone who grew up in an abusive household KNOWS this, has learnt that lesson before being old enough be able to leave for Hogwarts. Don't get attached, it's going to be used against you (Severus did once as a young child and has clearly learned the perils since he paid for it his whole life: after all that was how Albus managed to hold Severus in guilt and thrall for nearly 2 decades despite *Dumbledore* being the one who didn't fulfill their deal/promise re Lily) or destroyed before you.
Someone who has spend his adult years between two ruthless madmen with a pletora of personality disorders between them and one of them who used his own feelings against him should know better, dammit - he knew with Albus in the end, clearly. And I have a hard time seeing him blinded by sympathy or a public image in Potter's case.
The only sensible thing would be to take NOTHING away to his torturer's home or cleverer: to take only things he's not going to miss if - *when* - Potter destroys them or holds them ransom! Ideally things that *look* as if he valued them much more then he truly does, if he were really cunning.
It's weird, with this rampantly psychotic and sadistic Potter-nightmare in the story I feel *Snape* is the one seriously OOC.
The man who goes berserk when humiliated canonically, decides to go out in public with his abuser wearing that thing?! Voluntarily? Sorry, no. Perhaps after years of isolation and brainwashing but this isn't what happened here, isn't it. For him there hasn't been much time gone and he just arrived at Potters a few days (1?) ago.
And the "oh, I'm soooo hungry"-thing, after not even a single day?! Makes his earlier defiance look completely ridiculous. And I wonder how he'd survive days and weeks without food, which is after all perfectly possible physically. Clearly not this guy though....
Why does he internalize Potter's less than subtle tactics within hours? He's been menaced and manipulated by better and much cleverer people. Even if he does feel tremendous self-loathing: after just a few hours he already *shows* Potter his true feelings and weaknesses?! Serves them up on a silver platter? That's pathetically spineless and moronic. Why doesn't he express his feelings in the (for now) safe privacy of his own mind or better repress them. He gives Potter attack point after attack point with little to no effort from that side.
And so stupid?! He has no illusions about Harry's sanity and sadism, you made that clear. So EVERYTHING he takes away from Spinner's End, EVERYTHING that has value for him, sentimental or material, is GUARANTEED to become either a hostage or a torture instrument for Potter to use against him whenever he feels like it!
Someone who grew up in an abusive household KNOWS this, has learnt that lesson before being old enough be able to leave for Hogwarts. Don't get attached, it's going to be used against you (Severus did once as a young child and has clearly learned the perils since he paid for it his whole life: after all that was how Albus managed to hold Severus in guilt and thrall for nearly 2 decades despite *Dumbledore* being the one who didn't fulfill their deal/promise re Lily) or destroyed before you.
Someone who has spend his adult years between two ruthless madmen with a pletora of personality disorders between them and one of them who used his own feelings against him should know better, dammit - he knew with Albus in the end, clearly. And I have a hard time seeing him blinded by sympathy or a public image in Potter's case.
The only sensible thing would be to take NOTHING away to his torturer's home or cleverer: to take only things he's not going to miss if - *when* - Potter destroys them or holds them ransom! Ideally things that *look* as if he valued them much more then he truly does, if he were really cunning.
It's weird, with this rampantly psychotic and sadistic Potter-nightmare in the story I feel *Snape* is the one seriously OOC.
schedule
June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So Dumbledore treated Snape *worse* then Riddle or the Marauders ever did effectively and Snape is so pathetic and broken he welcomes and justifies it.
He's also so spineless that with your solution he *never* did anything out of his own volition: helped to destroy Voldemort, not even out of revenge or warped love for Lily, but always under others orders via slave-bond. Because *everything* was Dumbledore's will so nothing could have been Snape's responsibiltiy or merit! Makes even Wormtail look heroic and independent.... Urgh. I now wish Severus had died or been kissed here, that would be less demeaning and disgusting. It would have been kinder, there's absolutely no personality and own will there.
I'll abandon this particular story and hope I'll enjoy reading another one day by you: this is just too dark, depressing and demeaning for me.
He's also so spineless that with your solution he *never* did anything out of his own volition: helped to destroy Voldemort, not even out of revenge or warped love for Lily, but always under others orders via slave-bond. Because *everything* was Dumbledore's will so nothing could have been Snape's responsibiltiy or merit! Makes even Wormtail look heroic and independent.... Urgh. I now wish Severus had died or been kissed here, that would be less demeaning and disgusting. It would have been kinder, there's absolutely no personality and own will there.
I'll abandon this particular story and hope I'll enjoy reading another one day by you: this is just too dark, depressing and demeaning for me.
schedule
June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(Ch. 1-8) I've been following along with this story for a while now and thought I should review. Dark!Harry is wonderful and I love what you've done with Ron and Hermione. I love the meaning behind Hugo's name, it's very heartfelt and sentimental. Also, I very much enjoy the subtle, yet noticeable differences from the "Nineteen Years Later" epilogue. You've really put a lot of thought into this story -- I just can't get over keeping Hugo's name and giving me an actual reason to like it. Thank you so much for fast, double updates. I check frequently for this story!
Your faithful reader,
Mike
Your faithful reader,
Mike
schedule
June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WOW! That was a deep chapter. I could totally feel the emotion in it. I Hope near the end of the story the whole innocant/guilty issue is resolved. Please update soon! But why do i even need to say anything? You update really soon anyway. And then two chapters at once also! Keep up the good work!!!
schedule
June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Even though Snape HAD to kill Dumbledore the bond won't acknowledge that Dumbledore told him to? That does suck...And especially with Harry being evil incarnate. It must be hard for Hermione and Ron when they know that. Thanks for updating!
schedule
June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
How chilling was that last line:
schedule
June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i don't usually care for evil!harry stories. but i find this premise well thought out and intriguing. i think a cold, methodical harry is far more frightening than a mad and emotional harry. i am dying to know what has happened to twist harry this way. and even though i absolutely love snape, i'm enjoying a somewhat twisted happiness at watching him be so tortured by one he himself tortured for 7 years. looking forward to more. keep up the good work.
schedule
June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Harry...hearing those things almost makes you feel sorry for him. But I really want to know what happoened to make Harry evil like this! When do we get to know?! Haha I know you though...this story will be well on its wayt before you even hint as to why Harry is like this...*sigh* Thats why I think I love you. Ecxellent chapter. Imk glad we finally got to know who died and how the Malfoys are doing. Cant wait for more!
schedule
June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Harry seems so normal this chapter, even nice. It's hard to believe he's the same man who threw unforgivable curses at Severus to get him to write lines. And why lines? It hardly seems very tortuous except for some writers cramp. Or is Harry playing a more subtle game? Is he trying to brainwash Severus into believing that he really is guilty of all that Harry says he is? But that would mean that he thinks Severus believes he was on the side of the light and therefore might be innocent. . . hmm, I think I'm thinking about it too much, I'm getting a brain cramp. Harry just needs intensive therapy. Looking forward to the next chapter.