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THIS WAS A VERY VERY GOOD CHAPTER
KEEP GOING AND POST SOON
BYE BYE

Wow that was just wonderful. I love how you deviated Neville from his usual mold in fanfics, where he becomes brave but still the shy Neville even after the war. I find it quite refreshing, I just hope he doesnt do anything to Harry. This story is truly something else

Much better! And just the right thing to say to Neville, not only because it's true but because Neville will now be able to feel "Severus and I are in this together, we have a shared experience" rather than "I let Severus down". And since Neville is seeing Snape (rightly) as a suffering hero he can't now see himself as a villain or a coward for doing just what his hero had to do.

Should you ever feel inclined to do a tidy-up there are three typoes in this chapter, btw.

doing the decent thing and avert his gaze - mid-sentence change of tense, should be "averting" not "avert".

he decided he may as well remain - mid-sentence change of tense, should be "might remain" not "may remain".

Dust had been removed from he world - "the world" not "he world".

The passion is mounting...but in a realistic way considering their histories together. I'm glad we got a chance to see what is going on with George, Lee, and Oliver. So sad about George and Oliver..not sure what to make of Lee but I'm glad Sev found out, even if it was to ease his knowledge that he and Harry aren't alone in their misery. Loved that kiss : ) and that they'll be seeing each other more. I'm glad that Sev had a talk with Neville, he really was beating himself up, I guess I understand why, but if he had intervened this story may have turned out totally different, I hope he comes to realize that. Can't wait to see where they take this and how they will get there considering these little awkward conversations are bound to riddle their interactions for a long time. GREAT update : )

So much love, and yet again so much sadness, as Snape admits that he would put up with _anything_ for love.

But then, we already knew that.

I am not quite sure why you decided to re-write the last chapter, but I have to say the first writing of it was best. You accomplished so much with this chapter, but it doesn't flow with the lines of all the others. So, I have to ask, what is going on? Can I help in any way? I love your talent and want always to support it, in anyway I can.

Well, as for why I re-wrote the last chapter, there are two reasons.

1) The transition between a painful discussion and happy moments was too abrupt for my liking. (Emotional believability)
2) I wanted to directly connect Severus' conversation with Neville to the discussion Severus had with Harry. (Moving the plot forward)

That said, I had spent a good week re-writing this chapter, had a dozen versions of it, and I am quite ready to let it be as is at this point... Flow or not, I don't think it breaks the mood of the story in any drastic way, or presents some OOCness that wasn't there before.

In a way, this chapter is happy, but in a way it's sad, too--the slave bond has completely taken over both of them. Neither will know what their love might have been like without it. If Harry had killed himself, Snape would have died, too (Dumbledore was _so_ considerate, wasn't he?). And Snape does have a life of emotional and physical trauma to heal from, as does Harry. The slave bond will ensure their happiness, or so I hope, but at the cost of free will. Is there true love without free will? Snape doesn't run towards love, he _surrenders_. It may be better than the alternative, but the whole set up that made it necessary is just another chess play beyond the grave. One can only hope that Dumbles is roasting in hell, or stuck for eternity in Kings Cross listening to that baby cry.

I'm glad for this happiness. And now that Severus is going to meet Neville I look forward to possibly hearing about what happened between him and Luna. With everyone so happy, I can only think this twist you spoke of earlier has something to do with Neville, as he is the one who holds onto most of the bitterness. I'm glad for Severus's and Harry's relationship. It is very sweet and touching. Wonderful job. I forgot to comment on it earlier, but that line in the previous chapter of Harry calling Severus "horrible" amused me. Even now. lol

i hope snape saw neville with ginny