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for Me and Charlie Talking

by kitty163

person qwerty
schedule May 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You have a few grammar problems but overall, your story is pretty good.
I LOVE the poem-like phrases you interspersed in your story:

So we treat our love like a firefly
Like it only gets to shine for a little while

Catch it in a mason jar
With holes in the top
And run like hell to show it off

Oh promises we made when we
schedule May 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
well...that was interesting.