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June 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i just love your story i hope you eventually update it
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February 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
YAY, cool story,,, really starting to annoy me at how many are similar to this and all stop at this point!!! heir fo something, prophesy, let a co0uple people know and then they don't follow their own storyline. Hope you come back to finish it. Haven't seen anything like this finished yet so I'm going to just hope for the best :)
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November 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this is a good story please write more.
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November 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is really hard to read. It is very choppy and you use then a lot.
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October 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is such a cool story. Do you plan to update soon? You can email me at yahoo with the same name.
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September 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
are you going to update any time soon i just read this again and i like it so i was wondering when you might be updating
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August 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting story!
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June 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
man i love your story i hope you update soon, the pairing is so original to! (Atleast to my knowledge :D)
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June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This could be a very good fic, the idea and plot if thought through properly and written well can create an interesting read. I'm just not seeing that at the moment. The actual writing and presentation of the characters is childish at best, don't get me wrong I'm not trying to be mean with this. Is this posibbly a first or near first fic? because it does have the air of 'I'm a new writer' to it.
One big thing I find wrong with this is the way you have done Harry, Urber Harry is all right and fine with me if done right, what you've done is pile him with power and money in such a way that it seems you just want to have Harry this powerful and wealthy to make him the urber cool of the story. You also make Harry's personality and feelings towards his abuse a tad too happy and cheerful, it actually ruins the feel and makes him hateable.
Other than that it is good and I like it.
One big thing I find wrong with this is the way you have done Harry, Urber Harry is all right and fine with me if done right, what you've done is pile him with power and money in such a way that it seems you just want to have Harry this powerful and wealthy to make him the urber cool of the story. You also make Harry's personality and feelings towards his abuse a tad too happy and cheerful, it actually ruins the feel and makes him hateable.
Other than that it is good and I like it.
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May 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wonderful story i love it i look forward to seeing what happens next. ^_^