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April 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I really like how this is coming along, although I am indeed curious how it becomes a romance between the two.
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December 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
EXCELLENT!!!!!
I look forward to reading future chapters.......
I look forward to reading future chapters.......
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September 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You need to update this fic now.. It's been Months now!!
And you stopped at quite the cliff hanger one too!!
I really like it.. How will he take it, being offered his freedom??
And you stopped at quite the cliff hanger one too!!
I really like it.. How will he take it, being offered his freedom??
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July 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
God I love this story. I really hope you continue it.
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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3: So Lucius isn
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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Its a very good beginning to a story. But! The time line of only 5 months does not work.
Hermione wouldn't age that much in a small amount of time. Nor, would I think she could
get passed a new law in that time period.
Perhaps you meant 5 years? Which would work well. Still the story should get interesting from
now on. Best wishes,
Hermione wouldn't age that much in a small amount of time. Nor, would I think she could
get passed a new law in that time period.
Perhaps you meant 5 years? Which would work well. Still the story should get interesting from
now on. Best wishes,
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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I quite like that Lucius doesn't know her name; it gives me a feeling of understatement (which is what brought down Voldemort). Nice little plot device.
Its sad that divorce has been brought in, and that only Narcissa has opted for it - or is she the bravest to go for it, and others will follow the Queen of society?
Ah, Lucius thinks his wife doesn't have a brain; yet she's been brainwashed and trained to be the perfect pureblood wife. I reckon that there is plenty of gray matter under there that has been put to good use where Lucius can't see. Again, underestimation and complacency. The wizarding world is archaic in it's attitudes, and the muggleborns are helping it shift into a closer century.
This sentence just proves it:
Its sad that divorce has been brought in, and that only Narcissa has opted for it - or is she the bravest to go for it, and others will follow the Queen of society?
Ah, Lucius thinks his wife doesn't have a brain; yet she's been brainwashed and trained to be the perfect pureblood wife. I reckon that there is plenty of gray matter under there that has been put to good use where Lucius can't see. Again, underestimation and complacency. The wizarding world is archaic in it's attitudes, and the muggleborns are helping it shift into a closer century.
This sentence just proves it:
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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
There are quite a few online tutorials in spelling and grammar. Here's a 'few' for you (well, quite a lot really):
http://www.usingenglish.com/quizzes/
http://www.usingenglish.com/quizzes/
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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm with Lucius on this one. Why should he care about her "freedom". She's not in prison and is free to do whatever she likes. Narcissa should honor her marriage vows and stand by her husband until he's out of prison. Just because he has done wrong doesn't mean it's OK for her to do wrong. Also, Hermione doesn't mention anything about property division or alimony. What are the terms of the divorce?
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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Excellent! Please continue and update soon. Very soon! Lucius locked up and Moine as the cold business woman. There must be something else in there, am I right or am I right? Can't wait to see them develope. Is Luci getting out and discovering Moine's advantages? And will she play hard to get? Or is she attracted to Narcissa? Maybe there's time for a little threesome? I'm being naughty here, sorry. So whatever it might be, keep on going. LOL, Alex