rate_review Reviews

For starters, I checked the site and, even though it wouldn't send me straight there and I had to look for it, It wasn't as bad as I thought. I mean, I can't be disgusted at things like that or I will never make it in the medical field :) So kudos on using that as inspiration.

I don't know if you've noticed but I seem to chronicle my review in the order it was in the chapter. You see, I am kind of crazy when it comes to things like this so I have to open two windows, one for the story and one for review so I could get things just right.

Now....on with the review...

I love that line

hmmmm not going to lie hun, a little anti-climatic. I expected so much more from Hermione and Draco. I mean Draco's being high off the meds was funny, buuuuut it should have been more dramatic.

I'm sorry love, I just wasn't feeling this chapter. I wish I was, I really do, because you know how much I adore your story. I just had such expectations for this chapter... I mean, I loved the way it started out, getting inside their heads, and Draco's sudden realization of what it all meant, his honesty with the intoxication. It was great, but then it just kind of died. I liked that he was stabbed by his old school mates. But you should have had him fall. And I would have LOVED if it were Lucius who found him, not Hermione, and I would have loved that if in the middle of her fight, she caught Lucius carrying Draco to the medics corner, and then caught glimpse of Harry and Voldemort beginning their sparring of words before the end. I would have loved if you had torn her between the two. Really played up the devestation that follows a war, the confusion that follows love, and the loyalty that follows Harry and Hermione's friendship.

I'm sorry, I hope your not offended or put off or feeling bad about this comment. If you are I take it all back and will tell you something different.

Don't hate me too much. I'm always honest with my reviews. I felt I needed to be now. I just...I don't feel it.

Wow. I've managed to read this over the course of the last couple of days (maybe like, 2 or 3, I'm not sure I lose track of time during the schools year), and this is my first time reviewing (well... on here anyway, I do plenty of reviews for our newspaper). Anyway. I have to say, it's a pretty awesome story. The plot seems like it's well developed (although a bit random, I get the sense that rather than writing from a specific plot outline, you write what comes to you. Not a bad thing, just something I picked up on).
I like your characters, (ruby's my favorite, call me a sucker for that southern belle with a side of badass sort of characer), especially the fact that you keep the turned over characters realistic and show their internal battles with switching sides. I completely just lost my train of thought so... that's kind of the end.
Overall, good job, carry on, watch the grammar, it can be distracting.

OOH! I just remembered. It may be because I'm reading this in such a short amount of time, but it seems like the fact that in the first chapter you put so much emphasis on Hermione being a sloppy romance novel writer seems really irrelavent to the story, especially when it disappears completely shortly after introduced. Not really a big deal.

i wasn't able to read the chapter that you posted up, but if you felt that it lacked then you did great in taking it down and reposting. if you as the author of the story didn't feel comfortable with a chapter u did and took it down b/c of it then i think that u are just trying to give us the best u can and we appreciated. Thanks i can't wait to read ur edited version of the next chapter. i think it will be great.

I got tingles just then. I could really see all of them standing at the front watching, waiting for their futures to be decided. I could never chose between something like that. It's almost a choice of who you may be with in their final moments. Figuratively speaking of course (we all know they HAVE TO win :)) loved it. Have you heard anything about the job you're waiting on?

I did love the extension of chapter 39....hope everyone(except Voldemort and the evil deatheaters) survives...I want Bella to live for her baby mainly so I can see how her husband reacts to the news xxxx 11 out of 10

Oh hun you changed it!!!!
I feel awful, I hope you weren't upset with my review before.

BUT I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!

It was perfect.

Honestly though, I'm extremely sorry if you changed all your hard work because of something I said!!!! *gives you my best puppy dog eyes* love me? lol

<3

YESSS!!
and
NOOOO!!

Harry will kick Tom's ass! He simply must!
But Draco, oh Draco!!! He's just got to be ok. Just got to!
I can't wait for the battle between Harry and Moldy Voldy. :D
Love it.

When a story can make a reader laugh, cry and say "What the fuck?" then you know you're a real author. Good luck in college and tell the people who tell you to diet to "Fuck off and discover food because I can see your rib cage" because pudgy is sexy. So, from one pudgy chick to another PUDGY IS SEXY!!

It seems like everyone is getting their revenge. Loved Bella vomiting on her opponent and then killing him - hilarious. I hope she makes it through unscathed. Well, I hope everyone makes it through unscathed. I also loved Remus's disposal of Greyback and I do dearly hope that he is around to claim that reward.

Waiting for the next parts and trying not to bite my nails!