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September 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aww, it's over?
*sniff sniff*
I always feel so empty when things end. :(
But this last chapter was so poetic, so beautifully written. The whole thing was!
I'm glad I got to read such a wonderful story, you are simply amazing. ^_^
*sniff sniff*
I always feel so empty when things end. :(
But this last chapter was so poetic, so beautifully written. The whole thing was!
I'm glad I got to read such a wonderful story, you are simply amazing. ^_^
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September 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this. very sweet ending. but so sad to start with. very well written. very poetic.
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September 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, wow! I spent the first half of this going "What? He didn't turn Harry away did he?!" You have no idea how relieved I was to read the line that green was no longer the colour of being alone! And the little baby? So cute. I "aww"-ed out loud!
Really really impressed. If this what you do when I utter innocently, I should say more innocent stuff!
And congratulations on completing your first fic! Nothing quite like the buzz of that first one!
Erm...Author's Notes? Maybe? Please? SP
Really really impressed. If this what you do when I utter innocently, I should say more innocent stuff!
And congratulations on completing your first fic! Nothing quite like the buzz of that first one!
Erm...Author's Notes? Maybe? Please? SP
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September 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah! I knew you would find a good way to end the story. And now you've finished a story. Congratulations on a job well done. I hope you are happy with yourself, because the story was well told and the ending perfect.
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September 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I admit to reading this twice as I was a bit confused the first time. Then I checked the title and went "ahh." Lovely way to end the story, dear. I love your Snape's POV. He's always the right amount of tormented.
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September 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah, there is that introspective behavior that makes your Severus so believable. Severus has a habit of making assumptions based on what he perceeves as truth, and because he is alone much of the time it would seem he has all the time in the world to come up with likely scenarios and later elaborate. The amazing thing is that Harry while apparently having an oposite personality does the same thing! One would think that with that penchant there would be plenty of comedy but the results are usually so tragic.
When I read the first few chapters of your story it occured to me that you got that. There was a strong likelihood that both this characters would continue assuming and expanding and becomeing obsessed; the differece and once again you got it, is that Harry will be moved to do something about it while Severus would just hide behind his bitterness.
Well, it may be to late, but simply what I wanted to say was that Severus is a complex character and your portrayal stayed true.
When I read the first few chapters of your story it occured to me that you got that. There was a strong likelihood that both this characters would continue assuming and expanding and becomeing obsessed; the differece and once again you got it, is that Harry will be moved to do something about it while Severus would just hide behind his bitterness.
Well, it may be to late, but simply what I wanted to say was that Severus is a complex character and your portrayal stayed true.
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September 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*Bawls* that was defiantly well wroth the wait.
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September 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
awww it's over now?
I liked this story >3>
I liked this story >3>
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September 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1
This opening chapter is very lyrical, almost written like a poem. I liked it. ALOT.
Chapter 2
Another good chapter. I loved how you made Severus unable to speak. It opens the possiblities in the story, and finally gives Harry a voice around Snape. I can sense things are going to change between these two.
Chapter 3
Aw, that was sweet, that Harry said Severus' voice was the most beautiful thing he had ever hear, especially since he was rebuking Harry at the time. Our old Severus is back.
What is it hat Severus wants to tell him? I am very curious.
Chapter 4
That was sad. I liked how you reiterated the points that made Harry not need Severus and then echoed how much Severus truly desired Harry. Nice effect that.
Chapter 5'
Nice thoughts on Ginny from Severus' POV. Again, at the end of the chapter I am struck by the poetry of the last few paragraphs. I really like this story.
This opening chapter is very lyrical, almost written like a poem. I liked it. ALOT.
Chapter 2
Another good chapter. I loved how you made Severus unable to speak. It opens the possiblities in the story, and finally gives Harry a voice around Snape. I can sense things are going to change between these two.
Chapter 3
Aw, that was sweet, that Harry said Severus' voice was the most beautiful thing he had ever hear, especially since he was rebuking Harry at the time. Our old Severus is back.
What is it hat Severus wants to tell him? I am very curious.
Chapter 4
That was sad. I liked how you reiterated the points that made Harry not need Severus and then echoed how much Severus truly desired Harry. Nice effect that.
Chapter 5'
Nice thoughts on Ginny from Severus' POV. Again, at the end of the chapter I am struck by the poetry of the last few paragraphs. I really like this story.
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September 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6:
I like that line about Harry's being Heaven and Hell and everything in between.
What a hurtful thing for Harry to say, about leaving Severus for dead in the shack, and what a hurtful thing to say back. Good chapter.
Chapter 7:
Such well written conflict in this chapter. I like that you are portraying Severus with his sense of self-preservation intact. The ice wall is particularly effective.
Chapter 8:
Oh, good chapter. I can actually see the situation spinning out, and Severus losing his iron control. I liked the furtive, almsot shameful description of Severus losing himself and his way of taking the problem in hand, so to speak. I wonder what his house guest heard.
Chapter 9:
Woot! I'm glad Harry had the courage to confront SEverus. It's sad that both of them suffered so long under the delusion of Lily's love.
Chapter 10:
Oh, there is no chapter ten yet. How disappointing. HINT.
I like that line about Harry's being Heaven and Hell and everything in between.
What a hurtful thing for Harry to say, about leaving Severus for dead in the shack, and what a hurtful thing to say back. Good chapter.
Chapter 7:
Such well written conflict in this chapter. I like that you are portraying Severus with his sense of self-preservation intact. The ice wall is particularly effective.
Chapter 8:
Oh, good chapter. I can actually see the situation spinning out, and Severus losing his iron control. I liked the furtive, almsot shameful description of Severus losing himself and his way of taking the problem in hand, so to speak. I wonder what his house guest heard.
Chapter 9:
Woot! I'm glad Harry had the courage to confront SEverus. It's sad that both of them suffered so long under the delusion of Lily's love.
Chapter 10:
Oh, there is no chapter ten yet. How disappointing. HINT.