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June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Loved it! I liked it that Draco knew all along that Harry had been watching him and planned to seduce him. And, of course, I love the happy ending! Nice work!
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April 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Love rereading this!
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April 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this is really a good piece. the drama and almost-angst in the story is balanced by the humor and fluff. the characterizations are believable and well developed. the plot is romantic and realistic. i love the twists and turns. at first, i thought it was too lengthy for a oneshot. but after reading it, i realized it was very well written and cutting it would have probably diminished the effect of the story. it is really great. ;)
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April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That is such a great story. I love this blance between innocent, romantic and hot. Please write a sequel!! I want to read more *g*
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April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Two words... Guh...and Wow.
This story left me wanting more, more harry, more draco, more cuteness that is harry.
Wow. and Guh. Two very fitting words. Loved it!
This story left me wanting more, more harry, more draco, more cuteness that is harry.
Wow. and Guh. Two very fitting words. Loved it!
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March 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Excellent dear! Poor Harry! I laughed at him the entire story! Until the end that is.....<.<
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March 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, that was absolutely "beautiful," to quote Harry's many declarations. The characters were amazingly well depicted and believable and I am astounded that you managed such a successful portrayal of them within the length of a one-shot. I loved the carefully developed attraction and was as frustrated as Hermione when Harry refused to confront Malfoy about his newborn feelings. A truly well planned and all encompassing story, you did a fantastic job with the writing of it and the relaying of the character's motivations.
However, I have to mention this or it will eat away at me, you wrote 'dawned his cloak,' I believe you meant 'donned his cloak.' I'm sorry but homophones drive my insane, in my own work as well, the sneaky little buggers sound just fine while really taunting you with their alternate meanings. All the other mistakes are human and unavoidable nor do they detract from the plot for me. But that one line, it just would not let me go. I still loved this story and I hope beyond hope that you will write more. Thank you for sharing!
However, I have to mention this or it will eat away at me, you wrote 'dawned his cloak,' I believe you meant 'donned his cloak.' I'm sorry but homophones drive my insane, in my own work as well, the sneaky little buggers sound just fine while really taunting you with their alternate meanings. All the other mistakes are human and unavoidable nor do they detract from the plot for me. But that one line, it just would not let me go. I still loved this story and I hope beyond hope that you will write more. Thank you for sharing!
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March 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
would have posted last night but got cut off by the ''AFF downtime'', crap.
Hmm..DirtyD, short for Dirty 'Deeds', right? :-)
That was sooo good & the ending was sooo sweet, I'm still in a haze.
The only thing you need is to double check some of the grammar other than that you do brillant work thus far.
I like how in-depth you are in your stories. Now this one could have been a
''two-shooter'', just to see the end results of the ''reaction of the friends'',
especially Hermione, whom Harry needs to apologize to for being such an ass. After
all, he DID ask for her help.
Well, that's that...and I'll be on the lookout for whatever else you do.
Hmm..DirtyD, short for Dirty 'Deeds', right? :-)
That was sooo good & the ending was sooo sweet, I'm still in a haze.
The only thing you need is to double check some of the grammar other than that you do brillant work thus far.
I like how in-depth you are in your stories. Now this one could have been a
''two-shooter'', just to see the end results of the ''reaction of the friends'',
especially Hermione, whom Harry needs to apologize to for being such an ass. After
all, he DID ask for her help.
Well, that's that...and I'll be on the lookout for whatever else you do.
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March 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh thats hot!
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March 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think I'd like to watch that little obsession for myself! yummy!
11/10 for quality!
11/10 for quality!