rate_review Reviews

omg more please!!

Sorry...but no. It was way too confusing to finish reading it. You're story flow needs allot of work.

your story is interesting but it needs alot of work. you need to learn how to pace your story and a much better explanation is neede, i got confused on what was happening. get a beta, someone who'll help you organize your story and correct errors on spelling and grammar. if you post again, im sure il enjoy it. you've got a good idea about a story all you need is a better way of writing it.