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I'm so sorry you were sick, but I understand your pain. 'Tis the season, no? This was amazing though. Why didn't Harry continue with the thought process of Tom forcing him? Because he didn't have proof? How is anyone going to have proof of that?! Unless there's a witness, or he beats the crap out of Tom in the process. Even then Tom could state that Harry was playing rough, you know how Harry is. I mean... *growl* Stupid Tom. I can't wait for Fenrir to show up. Is he going to just take Harry, take Harry from Tom, or disrupt the whole pack and become Alpha? Oh, the possibilities! You have some amazing writing. And the piece you wrote when sick? I bet I can imagine. I wrote an essay for English back in high school when I was sick and doped up to the gills. I handed it in,a nd my teacher handed it back two days later telling me to rewrite it, and that she'd never speak of the first essay I handed in ever again. I'd talked about pink ponies and the grass in the backyard and the poem we were supposed to be analyzing... for a paragraph out of three pages. It was interesting. So, "don't write when you're sick" is excellent advice indeed. But this chapter was great. I loved it. And I love that you reply to your reviewers. Keep it up. ~dpa06~

well, I like the way you've thought this out, but I have to say, you've kinda rushed the beginning. Yeah, its important to get readers eager to learn more with a little action, but it is very difficult to connect with the protaginist and to care and empathise with them, when their character hasn't really been developed yet. Your authors notes are important, yes, but I couldn't pick up on any of the themes you described in them by reading the story alone. You should work on giving Harry a personality (and not the over-used "I am a submissive but I won't act like one" sort of thing you see more and more frequently in this fandom) first, making us really care about what happens to him, and then move on to the angsty-action scenes. Heh, looking back over this review it seems overly harsh, but rest assured, I like this and would appreciate being emailed when its updated. I only take the time to give advice when I like an author's style! ^^ So, good luck with the coming chapters and keep striving to improve! (btw incase you are wondering, the only stories I myself have published were written many years ago and are extremely sad little afairs, so if you are thinking "where the hell does she get off saying how I should write my stories when hers are shit with bells on?" then, well... I'm afraid I can't answer that question because I wonder sometimes too. ^0^)

very interesting start, i'd like to read what you have next

continue soon ^^

Wow.
I'll defiantly be interested to see how Tom will react to Fenrir. ^_^ I liked how everyone was in character, despite it being an alternate universe. And I can just picture Snape as an alpha.
Well- I'll wait till the next chapter to say more!
Much Love
Dee

I like to read more...a bit hooked to know what happens next.

OK I know it's only been a couple of days, but I'm going to start begging for an update now, as I have a few exams coming up and I can't concentrate on my study coz I keep having to check up on this story to see whether its been updated and it's driving me nuts!!!!!!! I'm totally in love with this story and this idea and I want more!!! Please? Pretty please? Please can I have some more? *Gets on knees* Please???? I don't know how else to beg here, other than to offer sexual favours like our fanfic characters do!! Please?

Can you hear the desperation? I'm hoping you update soon, I really want to read more before I have to closet myself away and study for my exams tomorrow.

But if you don't, that's OK. I'll read what ever is posted when I come back to fanfiction on Wednesday next week. *sigh*

xoxoxo ~gorgeousbowneyes

^.^ LOVE IT!!! Update soon!

absolutely love this!! can't wait to see how fenrir comes in!
please update this soon- i'll be checking back daily!

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I hope you update this soon it seems interesting and its really hard t find a well written werewolf fan fiction.

nice story