schedule
August 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That is such a cute story. I really love it thank you so much for writing it.
schedule
March 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This has some great potential, it's funny, it's quite lighthearted, yet a little sombre.
If you wanted, you could develop this and make it fantastic.
There are a few spelling and grammar mistakes, etc. If You do not already have a beta, she is more than willing to offer you her services.
If you are interested, please email this girl at tattered_euphoria1939 (at) hotmail (dot) com
If you wanted, you could develop this and make it fantastic.
There are a few spelling and grammar mistakes, etc. If You do not already have a beta, she is more than willing to offer you her services.
If you are interested, please email this girl at tattered_euphoria1939 (at) hotmail (dot) com
schedule
March 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's apparent that you aren't a native speaker. You switch back and forth between tenses and incidentally it's annoying. The idea behind the story is alright. I'd suggest you work with a beta to make your work flow better. Also, how did Draco die? Why had he chosen Potter's house to haunt?
Nikki
MisstressNicole@hotmail.com
Nikki
MisstressNicole@hotmail.com
schedule
March 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i like it but how did draco die?
schedule
March 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Might be just friendship but there's jealously there.