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for Changing of the Guard

by Lomonaaeren

schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aw, man. I missed a chapter! How did that happen? Argh, finals have been kicking my butt but I have two free days so I'm getting caught up. First off, as for Chapter 23, is it strange that I like Lucius? He seemed as if his paternal side was fighting against his Malfoy core, his anger, and his desire to get the best of his opponent. He tried so hard to give Draco options, admittedly horrid options, but options nonetheless. You could almost see his composure crumble, a very emotive and involving description on your part. It was very realistic and expected when Lucius' mask finally broke. I don't blame Lucius, how could you when you know how long Draco has been planning this, and I'm incredibly impressed by his strength of character that he managed to hold out as long as he did. And then Narcissa, oh, I could just gush! So... motherly! Perfection, simply perfection and I always, always hate her, and now I look forward to her involvement. Well done, you!

Chapter 24! Yay, yay, yay, yay, yay! Ha! Harry's becoming Harry and he doesn't even realize it, he thinks of it as a 'new persona' that needs to be perfected. Well, duh, he's hiding himself away for so long, fracturing his own personality into three separate psyches, with defining characteristics of himself rather than the whole embedded in each, of course it's going to need work to get back to what it was. But it's not a NEW persona, it's his old! It's the Harry Potter I know, and we love. Not the Boy Who Lived but Harry Potter! I'm so excited! I loved your description of being under the Imperius Curse and having it suddenly lifted, amazingly appropriate. It made me think of his crafted personalities in a new way, and just as he released a growl that he felt did not belong to him, I began to realize that it would feel as if you were being controlled, doing things that you would not normally attribute as your own actions.

I hate that Harry focuses so much on 'weak Harry' and how that's the real him, when it is only a piece, the real him is the one that is finally pulling itself together under his many masks, the principles of the 'weak,' the strength of the 'cold,' and the openness of the one that Draco bedded. The three Harrys are coming together to create a whole Potter. I love it! I have faith that the real Harry, the true Harry, will tell Draco the truth, I only hope that Draco asks the right questions. And I'm hoping that this 'new persona' as Harry sees it will not be as fleeting as his other personalities and Harry will see that this personality has everything he is looking for, but I'm sure that's a long way off.

Whew, anyway, sorry if this was a crap review, my brain is totally burned out and it's hard for me to sound intelligent anymore. But, despite all that, those two chapters were brilliant, and I especially loved how the last boosted the story along. Update wonderfully soon, you brilliant author, you!
person SamuraiSaaya
schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Loved this chapter. Dramatic and exciting. Finally the truth will come!
schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It is often hypothesized that the hardest type of regard to gain is self-admiration. For so long, Harry has made a business of
ignoring all that makes him up. I think its about time he came to respect the person that got him through the first 2 decades of
his life. I know Draco will probably appreciate it.
Thank You,
Lunatic with a Hero Complex
person s2kitty
schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Omg squee.... Harry is going to have sort his own head out now. I love that Draco has him down pat. <3 As usual I can't wait for the next chapter.
schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What do you mean you're not sure if I'll like Chapter 24? It's about freaking time!!! I LOVED it! How could I not? This was the confrontation I've been waiting for, and the MOMENT I've been waiting for; Harry finding himself, his voice, his core. He drew on all of his other personas, or rather recognized the parts of the other masks he has built as parts of his true self and now it's ready to be really open for the first time. The actual confrontation was tamer than I thought it might be. When Draco turned around anticipating violence, I got anxious. He was so right, Harry is very much like a caged lion at this point. I was yelling at the screen when he was thinking about going to get that Pensieve while Draco was sitting there wounded! I kept thinking "what an asshole Harry is" and that maybe he really didn't love Draco if all he could think about was relieving his pain while someone may be hurt or worse, dead. But it was so much deeper than that, as you always manage to show us. I can't wait for this conversation to ensue and to see what comes of it. I'm still disappointed in Ron, he has a gay friend and still seems so intolerant and insensitive. I hope Harry gives him a piece of his mind before the story is over. This was a AWESOME step forward in their relationship and a great chapter : )))))
person avihenda
schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
yhis will be interesting! what will Draco think when he understands how MUCH lies behind Harry and his masks. I'm looking forward to the next chapter and Dracos reactions. Well done! Keep it up!
person qwerty
schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Intense chapter.
Even though Harry has come to the realization that he's still, at his core, "weak-Harry", he still sees the need to create yet another persona to fit this new situation. I suppose it would be terribly unrealistic for Harry, at this moment, to realize that making up several personalities to fit any given situation is unhealthy. I supposed it needs to be a process for Harry to feel like he can be himself again. Given all of this, he's not really going to tell Draco the whole truth because he is in a new, but still different, persona. Will Draco see through this too?
update!
schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...it's almost as if Harry isn't even there at all. Sure he has his principles and his calm and collected personas and sure he fears that the reality of his situation will be discovered, a fear that in any normal situation would propose that he had something to lose but that doesn't seem to be the case here. It's as if Harry has absolutely nothing to be himself for. I can see someone wanting to run away from who they are, losing themself in the process, and if that were the case then I'm certain that someone of Draco's caliber, someone with his persistence could coax back the man that is Harry, but in this case it's almost as if Harry doesn't exist at all.

If that is the case then I find that even if Draco manages to tie him down by gaining knowledge of the inner most secrets that make Harry the person he is, that it will be a very unhealthy relationship since the person that Harry becomes will not be who he truly is but rather the person that best fits with Draco.

Either way I'm intrigued to see how you develop a true and meaningful relationship between Harry and Draco when it seems almost as if you've created a dynamic why two whole persons don't exist to interact in the first place.

In any case I'm truly loving this fic and I adore the frequency, quality, and length with which you update. It's a true pleasure to read this and I really love the pace of the story and how you've developed it to seem as though so much has happened between Harry and Draco despite the fact that it has been a relatively short time since they met through metamorphosis. I look forward to more in the future.

- Incessant_Darkness
person Dani
schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love this story! It is completely awesome!!! Is he finally going to tell Draco everything? I shall look forward to more!!!
~dani
person Yume111
schedule May 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting.
So now Draco finds his plan actually working, at least the part more important to him now, the part setting him free.
Does Draco love his father? Or has all that struggling for freedom and Lucius