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November 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
yeah great chapter can
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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It was nice and sweet althought that Dumbledore rape scene did make me shudder
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May 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really love this story :D
i really hope that you continue this :)
i really hope that you continue this :)
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April 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It seems like im going to be the first person to Criticize this Story.
The sypnosis really caught my attention, it seemed like a fic i might enjoy, but i was rather disappointed. It was poorly written, the one sex scene suggested it was written by one who dosn't know much about sex at all, and the plot moved far to quickly. Your characters have no substance or depth, and no growth as individuals. What little plot there seemed to be was highly cliche and boring, it lacked that spark of excitement a good story needs. After saying that, I do think you have some potential as a writer, but you must work very hard at gaining the skills needed to tell an interesting and exciting tale. I implore you to take this criticism lightly, as it was not meant as a personal attack, but rather what i hope to be constructive criticism.
The sypnosis really caught my attention, it seemed like a fic i might enjoy, but i was rather disappointed. It was poorly written, the one sex scene suggested it was written by one who dosn't know much about sex at all, and the plot moved far to quickly. Your characters have no substance or depth, and no growth as individuals. What little plot there seemed to be was highly cliche and boring, it lacked that spark of excitement a good story needs. After saying that, I do think you have some potential as a writer, but you must work very hard at gaining the skills needed to tell an interesting and exciting tale. I implore you to take this criticism lightly, as it was not meant as a personal attack, but rather what i hope to be constructive criticism.
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March 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
very cute. i'd like to see what else harry can do with his aloja powers, and what the daughters will become as they grow older. maybe more kids?
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March 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
please write some more. this is a good story.
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March 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
good story
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You have to continue. This story is awesome!
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March 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Harry but revenge will be sweet.
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March 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Excellent. I am glad that Harry and the twins were rescued by Tom and Severus. I hope that you continue, even if it is just one more chapter to show how the family is. Are the twins really powerful, do they have any more children. What happened to Dumbledore?