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March 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
thank you, i enjoyed this story greatly and look forward to more.
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March 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
no fair i want more update soon *kisses*
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March 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thanks to you I spent about five good minutes trying to get Transvestite From Transsexual Transylvania out of my damned head. I love RHPS Richard O'Brien is a genius, every time I see him I think of Lucius Malfoy and I have no idea why. lol. You are right though a mindfuck is the most pleasurable thing ever.
I swear if anybody has a mindfuck down to an art it is my Sir. He can say something so casual or rest his hand a certain way and my body and mind goes into high alert and he will keep me that way for HOURS... -Sigh- But that is the best way for it.
I think besides ya know the obvious fun that you get having somebody order your dinner for you tell you when to take a bath or eat or go to bed is the best thing in the world. It is nice to not have to worry about any of that when he is here and we slip into Domn/Sub mode. If it wasn't for him I would probably waste away in front of my books. Nobody really understands how nice it is, or really how HARD it is not to argue when they tell you to do something you don't want to do, but then in the morning you are so happy that they made you go to bed instead of just reading one more chapter of your book because you know you have no control to stop and having the required eight hours of sleep is nice.
I really like that you showed people a certain aspect of BDSM that nobody else really sees.
Sorry if my review is to long I get carried away. I guess it is just that idea that my Sir will be down in a week and I am excited.
KP
Looking forward to your next story. Oh and if you wouldn't mind I would really appreciate if you would review my story called Sadistic Sir and tell me what you think your opinion would be greatly valued. It's in the original section.
I swear if anybody has a mindfuck down to an art it is my Sir. He can say something so casual or rest his hand a certain way and my body and mind goes into high alert and he will keep me that way for HOURS... -Sigh- But that is the best way for it.
I think besides ya know the obvious fun that you get having somebody order your dinner for you tell you when to take a bath or eat or go to bed is the best thing in the world. It is nice to not have to worry about any of that when he is here and we slip into Domn/Sub mode. If it wasn't for him I would probably waste away in front of my books. Nobody really understands how nice it is, or really how HARD it is not to argue when they tell you to do something you don't want to do, but then in the morning you are so happy that they made you go to bed instead of just reading one more chapter of your book because you know you have no control to stop and having the required eight hours of sleep is nice.
I really like that you showed people a certain aspect of BDSM that nobody else really sees.
Sorry if my review is to long I get carried away. I guess it is just that idea that my Sir will be down in a week and I am excited.
KP
Looking forward to your next story. Oh and if you wouldn't mind I would really appreciate if you would review my story called Sadistic Sir and tell me what you think your opinion would be greatly valued. It's in the original section.
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It is nice that for once a person is using BDSM in the right sense. It hurts me, almost physically when people put up the BDSM warning and it turns into person A taking person B by force. My boyfriend and I while we don't live the lifestyle we drabble in it occasionally. Although it is strange when every few minutes Harry keeps explaining his feeling. Although I think I know why you are doin' it to show what the feelings are. I don't know maybe I was thinking if you could make it a little more -shrugs- I don't something so it didn't sound so forceful or obvious that you are trying to make people understand what BDSM really is... Does that make sense?
I also really like how Harry calls Severus Sir. That is what I call mine. Master gets so overplayed.. -smiles-
I will continue to read even if I don't review often.
KP
I also really like how Harry calls Severus Sir. That is what I call mine. Master gets so overplayed.. -smiles-
I will continue to read even if I don't review often.
KP
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very well done. As a dom myself, I was pleasantly surprised when I found that it wasn't mindless sadism, but an in-depth look at such a type of relationship. So many stories are just mindless pain and angst when it comes to sado-masochism. It is good to see someone so familiar with it. Though I do wonder if it's just 'book'-learning or some of your own experience. ;) Either way, thank you for one of the most pleasant BDSM reads I've seen in a long time.
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A mental mindfuck can be nice is the quote, and it comes from the movie The rocky horror picture show.... i like the way you think, and i love your story.. can't wait for more...
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OOoh, I'm sad to see this end! It was so good! Great work!
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OH LOVED THIS STORY!!!!!!!! Thank you so much for sharing it, and for showing the other aspect to BDSM that most people don
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This isn't a pairing I usually get into, but it was good. I think you should add at least one more chapter where they get into the hard stuff.
There are a few things you could improve on as far as spelling and grammar. There were a bunch of small mistakes that could be taken care of by a good editor. And no offense to your beta, most of them were common mistakes that a lot of people make and miss. I myself like to have more than one beta because one will catch something that the other didn't, and vice versa.
The other thing I noticed was short paragraphs. You branch off into a new paragraph when you don't need to, which makes your paragraphs very short and choppy.
But all in all you get a thumbs up from me. I enjoyed your story, and I look forward to seeing more of your work.
There are a few things you could improve on as far as spelling and grammar. There were a bunch of small mistakes that could be taken care of by a good editor. And no offense to your beta, most of them were common mistakes that a lot of people make and miss. I myself like to have more than one beta because one will catch something that the other didn't, and vice versa.
The other thing I noticed was short paragraphs. You branch off into a new paragraph when you don't need to, which makes your paragraphs very short and choppy.
But all in all you get a thumbs up from me. I enjoyed your story, and I look forward to seeing more of your work.
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good story!