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I got that Severus had got turned back in time but wait he's brunette now? x.x

Great first chapter. There are only a few spelling errors but I'm sure you will edit them. Update soon!

Not bad, but I definitely recommend finding a beta or at least a good spell check program; many of the errors could have been caught by just a little bit of editing details. If you don't know the tricks, just ask.

This is very interesting and tempts me to write my own version. ;3

I like this story, but am a bit confused about one major point. Wouldn't everyone, especially Hermione, recognize Severus? People don't change that drastically in looks from age 17 to age 40. They would still be able to tell it was Severus, just younger. That part of the story might have to be looked at. But, I like the concept of the aging potion accident causing Severus' body become younger. To me, that is a better "time" story than the ones that evolve time travel! I look forward to the next update.

Interesting, but a few things need to be corrected. Harry's mum is Lily, not Lilly. Also l, a group of rooms are a 'suite' not a 'sweet'. I am interested in seeing where you take this, but keep in mind spelling and grammar.

ohh of course its good! i very much like it plz continue =)

How did the potion change the passage of time? Surely everyone would remember the snarky potions master and wonder where he'd gone - and Hermione would no doubt put two-and-two-together to come up with five. Any chance of Albus explaining how the past has changed the future so that the present is different (and that sentence just gave me a headache, lol).

And how did the present change the past? did Severus go to Hogwarts thirty years ago? Was he victimised by the marauder's? Did he fall in love and make an utter mess of it)with Lilly? Or did his potion wipe him from the past and insert his younger self in the future, the future which is the present... and I've confused myself again.

I do LOVE a young Snape fic, it makes it so much easier to place him with Hermione - because, lets face it, it realistically wouldn't have lasted more than a week with Ron. I'm looking forward to the conundrum's being unraveled and the characters developing!

9/10 for the opening chapter.

A great start and I like the idea of a young Snape!
But Severus Snape introducing himself as such is a bit confusing. If you don't want him to go to school as himself (like in the first version you had up) you could easily do so by giving him the name and identity of a (fake) family-member, like "Something" Snape or Prince. This would explain why he looks like himself, calling it a family-resemblance.
Keep it up!

Ooh I'm interested to see where this goes, Sev adn Hermione being the same age, both excellent at potions......rubs hands with glee. Maybe Sev can have the love he should have had......*please* continue
Savine x