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Firstly, I just caught up on all 7 chapters of this story and I am really enjoying it so far. :)
The pairing is unique and the way you write both Bella and Hermione is captivating, I honestly can't wait for the next chapter.
I love the whole idea of Lucius and Bella competing against each other, that is so their character because they're both arrogant.
Overall your idea is very intriguing and it's so hard to find well-written femslash that isn't trashy, so kudos!
Can't wait for more!

This chapter was fine. It brought into light a few things. The fact that Bella is more mesmorized by Ava then she first let on. Of course Narisca showing up in this chapter was interesting, as was the flirting on Bella's part. Which will always creep me out. Not one for Blackcest. As for Malfoy I worry about his role in this story and what will happen if Ava(Hermione) ever asks Bella for help with the fact that she just automaticlly answers questions without actually knowing the real answers for them. Looking forward to reading more whenever you can put it up. I look forward to reading if Arian has anything more to do with the story.

i hope you update soon

Great story so far! You've done a wonderful job on maintaining the characters' personalities. I can't wait for more. This is one extremely interesting fanfic. Can't wait for Hermione to get back... Wonder what will happen between her and Ginny. Update soon and keep up the good work!

I really love this story, you have to finish it soon. Please?

Awesome story. You dont get a lot of Bella and Hermione stories but this one i can tell is going to be a fav of mine.

update soon please.

so...ya gonna finish this, its pretty good

This is a great story. Looking forward to seeing how it turns out.

Glad to know that I wasn't so off base. This chapter was better then I imagined. Their conversation was perfect for their characters, in my opinion, and the spell that Albus/Snape used sure is working. I was happy to see that Snape has made his appearance and that Malfoy was shown who was boss by Bella. I'm really looking forward to how things progress through the story and when all that promises smut begins to grace the chapters. Though I have to admit I'm more so looking forward to seeing what Malfoy might do in retaliation and if he follows her orders to stay hands off with Ava. Not that I think Ava would fall for Malfoy's charms at all...but its a thought to think about. Always looking forward to reading more. Please come back when you can.

Really liking where this is going, can't wait until more is written. I've never read a Bella/Hermione fic before, but I'm hooked already, regardless of whether those two get together or not. I liked the banter of the last chapter.

One caveat I do offer is not to make Ava too perfect. She needs to have some character flaws and growth, otherwise she'll come off as a Mary Sue.