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for To Play with Fire

by Serinah

person genna
schedule March 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I have problems when I write in balancing the details. It can be too fast and the story suffers from having too few details or it can be too slow and have too many details.

Here, I notice how much the characters are thinking. They interact but they don't necessarily spend a lot of time talking to each other.

Good luck with your busy schedule.
person kazfeist
schedule March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thanks, Serinah! I got to GE fairly often. You've done a great job with a familiary plot idea. I seem to remember the broken left hand...did you post this, a while ago, over at FF.net, too? Anyway, thanks for the update and I'll go over to GE for the rest. :D
schedule February 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"listening" to Draco's thoughts in the story really makes everything all that more realistic.....enjoying this very much!
schedule February 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh come on draco go get ur girl!! i love this please update again soon doll!
schedule February 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow really lovin this cant wait for more
schedule February 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*Gasp!* Oh my goodness! I can't believe this, I feel for Draco I really do. Great story, I really hope you update again soon!
schedule February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
more please!
person ichiruki
schedule February 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Liked Chapter Two, interesting development, makes me want to skip the review thing, and move straight to three. LOL.

My only suggestions is that I think you might need a beta to catch some of the little errors, but over all they weren't too distracting. I think the one that stands out to mind is "But the truth was that Malfoy could be described as handsome, if not [for] his ugly ever present sneer."
person ichiruki
schedule February 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hmmm quite the interesting first chapter, I can't wait to see what else happens in the next.
schedule February 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Excellent story! Keep the updates coming!