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for The Lion and the Serpent

by emilywaters

schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh damn..this Calixa girl is bad news. She only confirms why Harry is treating Slytherins the way he is...I hope Draco stays away from her, but something tells me, he's going to run into her a lot. Did I sense some sexual tension between them? I wonder what she means when she says there are ways around the bond for alluding mind penetration? Still loving it : )
schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
goss thats incredible but also insane!
schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I actually waited to review this story until there were a few more chapters up because I'm a little torn about your story. First off, you're writing is really good and you're capturing Draco's and Harry's turmoil very well. But what irks me is the lack of backstory, it raises a lot of questions. That said, the hints and clues you leave are tantalizing. In short, I really do like your story, please keep it up.
schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Why wouldn't he remove the hoodie? Let him burn? I sooo need chapter 12!!!!
person Dezra
schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is a really interesting story so far. I can't wait to find out if there is anything that can be done about the encroaching darkness that Harry unleashed accidentally.
schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, OK, this story is just pulling me in deeper and deeper. I like how you had the final battle go down, with Neville dying and Harry charging Voldemort.Very interesting how you describe him spreading, like a virus over everything. I wonder if that's what's infecting Calix or if she's just naturally like that. What's up with Hermione knowing about Harry's undergarments and sleeping with him in his bed, asking him to take off his hoodie? Are they "together" or bed buddies or something? That would be interesting to say the least. It was kinda deep hearing Harry ask Hermione to "just let him burn", he does want to punish himself...I hope he isn't infected with Voldemort's evil essence or something...so good...keep it coming : )
schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
DAMN! Harry really is dark...he did that to himself..only in the shape of a Gryffindor Lion? Very cool and scary. So he has to rape Draco? This is gonna get more disturbing by the minute it seems...Poor poor Draco. Lucius is so cruel...it was interesting that Harry didn't seem to care that Draco didn't take the mark willingly..maybe he's still so jaded about his own childhood and anger over Ron's death that he can't care anymore. This is so riveting..
schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow i hate lucius now!
schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, powerful chapter. Harry is right, Draco obviously had no regard for life when he did that, it was so meaningless how Ron died. I was holding my breath though at the way Draco attempted to kill himself. He really wanted to suffer for what he did I suppose. It's a good sign that Harry stopped him and from the sounds of it, sounded panicked at the thought of him dying. I'm sure that won't stop him from making him suffer though. I wonder how Draco got Lily's locket?
person LadyJen
schedule February 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Your story is fantastic so far! Dark!Harry is one of my kinks. :) I hope Draco will find a way to help Harry. Also, I was curious about Draco's mark. Why is it so different from all of the other deatheaters? Was he meant to be a sex slave for Voldemort? Poor thing. Update soon!