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for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

by LaBibliographe

schedule May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So uh....just how soon is soon? lol You tease.....but you know I love it! hehe Another wonderful update m'dear. I can't wait to see what happens next! Oh and for the record. I'm more than happy to be Hermione's "second", for lack of a better word. You see I only felt it right to offer my assistance, you know, the polite thing to do. lol
person Utopia
schedule May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The title amused me. lol. This update made me smile.

Did anyone tell Lucius that you're supposed to carry your bride across the threshold, not into a back alley? Did he miss that lesson in life?

Flowers. I want flowers. I wonder if I'll get flowers when my baby comes to pick me up TOMORROW! Woooooooo! I wonder if dropping hints about flowers would work? *cheesy grin*

Is it the same bed after 200 years? I hope they have put a new mattress on it!

Naughty paintings on the wall? Was this relative an aging nymphomaniac? (Have you seen the producers?)

Oh? So the wizards aren't like the Romans? No advanced plumbing? I thought M. Manor might be a bit like a small version of a Roman bath house. They had underfloor furnaces heating the water and pipes taking the dirty water away. Its odd that M. Manor doesn't have plumbing! Poor clean freak Lucius.

Did the veil induce the son's death? Lucius's trail of thoughts has my head spinning!

When I imagine the Malfoy suite, I see the best room in a local hotel (and I never actually got to sleep in it, my future Mother-in-law let us in for a look when she and my baby's step-father stayed there after a party we went to). The hotel is all in burgandy and cream, and you go down a flight of 6 stairs to the room, and then the four poster (hung with red velvet and gold trimmings) was on a little plinth that had two steps to it. I wish that room was mine. Maybe we can re-create it?

*and where was I, other than at the Gomersal Lodge Hotel?*

Ah, the truth is out. Poor thing is nervous of the sexual paragon that is Lucius.

He hisses like a cat? lol.

As usual, another brill chapter.
person Muffy
schedule May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love the sparring(sp) :)
Two of my favourite themes...time travel and period pieces. This story is giving me such a thrill, though I don't usually seek out Lucius/Hermione. You're style is holding my attention. I am quite enthralled with your characterisations. Bless!
schedule May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
After all the previous development, I wasn't expecting them to fall into bed, so I was actually quite amused. I love your Hermione, she stands up to Lucius so beautifully.
person Pumkin
schedule May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
so trying not to hex you right now. the only thing stopping me is that you promised soon. update soon please before i resort to begging. wait i just did oh well i will beg please.
person jw
schedule May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ch 20-21 - the wedding rings sound lovely, although I wish Lucius had gotten himself a diamond too. men in those days wore jeweled rings, I believe. the lack of bathroom - heh-heh! yeah, that was a bummer about Regency days, plus infrequent bathing habits and lack of good soap; good to know Lucius will fix that. so you stopped the newlyweds right before - I hope he sees that she's just jittery and will stop falling for her (subconscious?) avoidance tricks. thanks for addressing the question of the 'real' heir showing up - I'm sure you've got that solution already prepared!
person Rini
schedule May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
My exam well
person Pumkin
schedule May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
and now to the wedding night. hope you update soon.
person Josie
schedule May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was slightly unexpected.
BUT, did he do that just to get into her pants? Err.. well, dress. Or to secure that she wouldn't go away. Or is he finding himself just a tad bit too interested?
Or a combination of all the above.
AAH PLEASE UPDATE.
This is the first WIP story I've read since I first started reading fanfics (4 years ago-ish) Soo.. pretty please update soon.
Wow, when I think about it, before I started reading your stories I didn't review, ever, and I never read WIP's. Damn, you're good.
schedule May 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
How sweet and slightly deviant of Lucius to plan a wedding ceremony without Hermione's knowledge. I am understanding this new world Hermione and Lucius have been delivered to. Though I can't really tell if the events that are truly happening and will change history or it's just a illusion that they're part of. Keep writing!