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for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

by LaBibliographe

person pasen852
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wonderful as always you have me hooked and checking back daily lol as for stroppy it covers a lot of things mad , sullen , jealous , sarcastic saying things just to provoke a reaction hope you update very soon xx
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh my, delicious inklings of a future Hermione laying wand to the wizard. Yummy. :)
person Lady Dragonfly
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Whenever I look at the Lucius/Hermione pairing at AFF, when I see there's a new chapter of Beyond the Veil (or any of your stories), I say "Yay!" I like that you continually ramp up the tension (sexual or otherwise) between you characters.

Next chappie soon, please! :)
person amyfeddy
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I want to be next in line or hermione either will do, just to be taken over his knee and spanking good and proper. Good thing I am sitting on a few towels, just the thought of it is too much. Hermione needs to be as smart and independent as she used to be, this hanging on to the past crap is getting old, she needs a few more "little deaths" at Lucius' hand. Or maybe she let him obilivate her bad experiences so she can let go. As always I will patiently await your next update.
person mandigrrl
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, I realized we weren't going to see Lucius' painting choice yet. But, a girl can anticipate right? :) I really liked this chapter. I love your updates. I have yet to read a bad chapter.
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter. I think that Margaret should have kept her mouth shut about what Lucius does. However I am glad that Hermione is thinking of adding spankings to their relationship. I look forward to reading more.
person doodle
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I was wondering how she had come to such a self imposed cell. She has been a prisoner of her own making. I love their interaction. Seeing someone do something (the pictures) is not nearly as much fun as discovering it yourself. Secret to a remarkable teacher...hum Lucius as an instructor? Oh the possibilites...
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yay update! I'm happy to see Hermione is coming around to Lucius' sexual tastes. I can't wait to see how it all happens! I haven't read Lucius and his Waif yet but I'll certainly look into it soon. Can't wait for the next bit!
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Heh, heh, Hermione's got a little kink in her. So she might be just what Lucius needs.

Yes, broken springs are not conducive to great sex. Been there, done that, never want to do it again.

Thank you for Lucius letting Hermione know about the prostitutes. There wasn't much a woman could do if she were on her own at that time. Hermione's modernist prudery needs to be curbed, or those women would have no place to be, and possibly end up in a much worse situation than they already are in. That was heartbreaking about the little girl, Agnes, and about Draco. I wonder if he did the boy any favors, though, by Obliviating him.

Yes! Lucius is the best! I hope she takes his words to heart about him wanting more of a life with her than what she's willing to give. They need each other more than either of them can see.
schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 27:


Pip I assume is in reference to the general appearance of the little bud LOL. There were also the words "cunny" "cockstand" "quim" and my favorite "pizzle" that were tossed about. I never thought synonyms could prove such fun. =)


I am a little surprised that oral and missionary would be all they had engaged in. How can any woman not see him and want to just crawl all over him!!


Those paintings....I want prints.


I have to say, if she knows that being a gentleman in bed is as "unnatural to him as Voldemort favoring pink" that she would be unsatisfied knowing he was keeping himself from her. What good is a lover who keeps part of themselves locked away?


Shes a stubborn one. Personally I am in love with the concept of being in love...and the concept of reformed bad boys that retain their "edge"....I would have been lost to him after the first kiss....by the time we got to the shagging I would have been his slave.


Blabbermouth harlot! You dont say things like that to a mans wife!! Luciuis is in the doghouse now...where he should be...he shouldnt have been dallying with whores....didnt he promise her fidelity? or am I confused?


Im torn between the sides on this one...Mione is being stubborn about her refusal to try new things. Hell, my take on that is Ill try anything once, if I dont like it, then it is never mentioned again. But Lucius is also grating on my nerves because I believe strongly in fidelity.....so I can find in favor and in error on both their sides.....



Should be interesting to see if they can come to a happy compromise that keeps Lucius's hands off of strange bottoms and Hermione from building her walls any thicker.


Happy Writing!
SG