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for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

by LaBibliographe

person Utopia (not logged in)
schedule August 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Blood's non-Newtonian, and it's what I'm looking at for my final 3rd year project. Custard is also non-Newtonian, if you're interested.

As for no colouring from the sun, all I have to do is look in the mirror, you can see the veins at my temples I'm that pale. I take one look at the sun, burn and then go back to drip-white. I used to be able to count all my freckes on my fingers; I've quite a few more these days from the sun, but I've always been very pale. Burning on my nose and cheekbones has given me more freckles to add colour, Even two weeks in the med or Tunisia has me coming home no more tanned than I set off! My back tans a bit, as does my tummy - but you can hardly tell. Though, I spent all last year rather ill, and I think I'm still recovering from that. I like to think of myself as pale and interesting - but my baby does sometimes call me 'death warmed up' on a morning. My colouring comes out of a bottle, and only when I can be bothered to rub the stuff in. I'm sot of a peachy-magnolia shade all over. My Mum's the same, but she spends time under one of those UV sunbeds to give her a slight tan - but I won't go near them as (a)they're bad for you and (b)they make me claustrophobic and want to run a mile (and when you're naked, that's not a good plan)... and I'm completely off topic... back to the fic, lol.

Painting ahead? One of them's an artist? eh?

Oh... painting. *smacks head on keyboard*

At least he's got the sense to know she's sore and abstain a bit for her comfort. A girl likes a fella like that.

Curly? Oh, Lucius, how original lol.

Lucius, if you think you're master in this marriage, then you've a LOT of learning to do! lol! Without her planning menus and organising the staff you'd be screwed to high heaven! You might be the man of the house - but without the woman you're lost at sea! Silly Lucius think's he's the boss.

Lucius, don't p*ss off the woman who will have your penis in her mouth... teeth. are. sharp. 'nuff said. A little nip gets all sorts of things across to a bloke.

Ah... switch Lucius is sooooo much more fun - oh, the possibilites with that one! *mmmmmm, dribbles*

Atleast he washed first, that's just good manners, in my opinion.

,i>Next decade! Lucius, you arse! Does he have ANY idea how frightening the concept is? Took me two YEARS to have the guts to do it! And then I wished I hadn't because I ended up being violently sick! Took me ANOTHER two years (and a very informative book) to have the courage to have another go, much to my baby's utter delight and total shock, he'd resigned himself to never having me do it again... though her pause was for a different reason.

Do the Hogwarts Rose bushes not have thorns? *blink* thorns are sharp and prickly; not to mention the Hogwarts ones have fairies living in them... Nah, I'd be behind a shed somewhere.

There ARE less arousing nerve endings on a penis? Really? I think my other half lacks those! lol! (I'm Soooooo glad he doesn't read this!)

So much for abstaining a bit, Lucius. lol. Wonder why he stopped her?

Oooh, the dominant one... Hermione for sure. As said earlier - don't argue with the woman who's got your bits in her mouth! lol!

No seriously, she was in control through that and Lucius was pretty much passive. His hand position behind his head was a submissive one (and if I recall my readings on such things and various documentories, it's a position of 'questioning'). If Lucius had been the dominant one, he'd have been giving more instructions and his hands would have been placed differently.

He was sat sorta sprawled out on the little sofa thing, and sitting like that with your legs spread is very submissive - you're letting someone have total control of you - all it needs is for her to grab his knees and push and he can't close his legs to stop her. It's a very vulnerable pose. Oral sex with the man standing (providing his feet aren't stuck to the floor, or something similar) gives the man the opportunity to move his legs, as well as look down onto the felatio performer. Lucius could have looked down if he wanted - but she could have stopped him moving. (does that make sense?)

I've also read somewhere that a submissive male should never see their dominant on their knees or performing oral sex - and Lucius had his face to the ceiling of the gazebo with his eyes closed. A female dominant would blindfold a submissive male before kneeling to perform felatio.

Hermione also rode him in a kinda 'female superior position' (how it was described in another book I've read) - that position puts her firmly in the driving seat - and he hasn't really got much leverage to thrust against her.

Yes, Lucius initiated everything, and at first he was the one in charge - but it soon shifted... however, Hermione is very green to all this, and should he have told her to stop and back off she would have... as any submissive/Dominant relationship works - so, in reality, who's actually in charge of such a lifestyle - because a Dominant will back off if a safe word is spoken, and a Dominant still needs consent from a submissive (otherwise its just abuse or rape!)... so, who's incharge? The answer is both - it just depends on the timing.

Wow... that was quite the essay! *blinks*










schedule August 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was an excellent chapter. I can't wait to read more.
schedule August 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 34:

I am reading it for the mystery. Yeah...


He says 'Lick me like a lolly..." Then calls her 'Curly'? How precious is Lucius?

Yeah, I'm glad I'm not at work. I think both assumed the dominant role in this scene. Lucius is more demonstrative in his dominance while Hermione is moe subtle. Both approaches work well for their mates. I can't imagine Lucius wanting a dominant mate that shows it in any other way but the way she does show it.

I also think Hermione, who can be bossy, inflexible and pendantic, wants to be dominated at least in the bedroom. She needs a masterful Lucius (Well, don't we all?) at least in the bedroom. I would hate to see him try it elsewhere.

Great job as always. Yes, the sex was awesome, you know that already.
person The Green Fairy
schedule August 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic! I love updates! :)

Im my humble opinion Lucius is the more dominant in bed and otherwise because he restrains his power in order to assure Hermione's comfort, which to me is a sign of dominance, as if he's sparing her the brunt of his lust and anger. however I am inclined to think that Hermione shall surpass him in time because as she lets go of her inhibitions, she will gain ore insight to herself as well as Lucius, and then learn to apply it to her life.

Sound sort of accurate?

Great smut. Great smut! You and the spanking...is most satisfying to the knickers :)

L'amour

The Green Fairy
person amyfeddy
schedule August 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It could be said that while the submissive is on the receiving end of the punishments, they are the ones who are really in control. That being said I think Hermione was the one in control, from the tickling to riding Lucius to completion. Love your lemons, bring more and we can do something fabulous with them.
person doodle
schedule August 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What do you mean when you use "switch"? I think they are both dominant when they need to be. It is much more fun to let the other be in control some of the time.
schedule August 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It was great to see Hermione
person Jesse
schedule August 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey!!! I read the story for the mystery!!! ....... *giggle*snort*giggle* all right fine... I don't read your stories for anything besides the smut. Sheesh! Is this such a crime! No! I don't think so! ;) Anyways I look at the plot you give your stories as the extra whipped cream to the already perfect banana split. We are already quite happy with the banana split but we could never say no to extra whipped cream. Especially if it is Lucius who is holding the can of whipped cream!!!!!!! Now please excuse me while I go gorge myself on a banana split. YUMMY!!!
schedule August 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think they alternated a bit being dominant. And if she was as aroused as you described, the sore rear just made it all that much more intense. I like that Lucius took the lead and then let her do things her own way. And I enjoyed the way she was teasing him.
schedule August 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lol, 'my complexion will darken if I don't keep my bonnet on'. It's a good thing Lucius knows her better than that.

I wonder what Hermione's research will uncover - in fact, I'm looking forward to more uncovering in general ;).

I'm glad Lucius got an explanation of The Wizard of Auds, even if he did worry about losing face. I think he needs a bit more knowledge of Muggle culture if he isn't going to fall victim to many more of these misunderstandings.

The story is moving on nicely - I do have to wonder what Lucius had in mind when he mentioned re-enacting one of the more outre paintings though...