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for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

by LaBibliographe

person Utopia
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
EH! Where's my review gone from last time? I spent ages writing it! I was going to get huffy at not getting a reply - but lo and behold there is NO review! It was about a page long on Word! Stupid AFF.

For goodness sake! Lucius, get your claws in at the Breakfast table!

Clever Hermione! Asking an expert! Brilliant!

TMI on the candles. I didn't want that image. Though, that's really dangerous as once something's lost up there then getting it back generally needs a trip to Casualty (ER) to remove it. In fact, there are a lot of sex-acts-gone-wrong that end up in Casualty - usually people having to have things removed from bottoms because they've lost them up there! Anything going up there has to have either a really wide bottom end so it can't enter or a handle to keep hold of.

So, the muggle world was a mental training ground - but everything that happened there was an accident?

I wonder if there's a bit of veil sewn into the sorting hat?

Killing tree roots in real life is a nightmare! Doing it politically is going to be like swimming in custard!

Ah... so there is a selfish reason for Lucius... he's looking out for his own future family - but with Hermione's muggleborn genes, will there BE any more linx?



person CoCoM
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lucius, a snatch!! I was laughing my butt off. Hermione is so silly sometimes but we love her. And I know I am going to be loving the next chapter if the goings ons of that painting mentioned will be making an appearance....*holds breath in anticipation* Hehehe!
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter. I look forward to reading the next one.
person Lurky loo
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another chapter, woohoo!! I'm enthralled by this story, and thought this chapter moved along nicely. Good tease, by the way. And I love that Lucius' scent is Lime. Rather close to him always have an innate lemon smell to him. Guess I'll always hope for Lucius lemons, tee hee. Please tell me that the next chapter has groves of citrus. I'm so looking forward to it. Thank you, once again for the most excellent entertainment. Great diversion, just when I needed it most.

~Mia
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another fabulous chapter! Though I
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hiya, i've been lurking in the background reading through this - and re-reading some bits! this is absolutely brilliant. Just wanted to say that and please keep up with the not-quite-a-week-between-updates thing. It makes my day/week to find an update to a story I am enjoying so much!
person nitesfool
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
LOL>>> well i'm glad that the whole fingering comment wasn't too personal...lol. but yeah, i'mma warn u now that i'm tired, watchin a show, and anticipating a dentist appointment i gotta run to in a hour, so i don't know how good of a review i can give, but for u i'll try.... now, on with the story!owwww.... hermione's researching freaky things, why am i not surprised....EXPERT... WHAT EXPERT!!!AWWW....lucius is so insecure about his age(though he does a good job hiding it)...lol!!!!! she's takin sex lessons...PRICELESS! OH NO.... BOOTY PENETRATION!!!! i've been tryin to get my man cakes to agree to let me do it for the longest... not a dildo though... just a finger.ohhhhhhhh.... we're back to the veil again... i almost forgot about the little conspiracy it had against them...lol.... roastbeef... ur such a riot...lol!he he... the body came out the other side....SUCKERS!AH HA.... that was a great comparison.... i'mma have to give u props on drawing a parellel between the sorting hat and the veil... "DIPPING HIS WICK".... I GOTTA USE THAT ONE ON SOMEBODY AND WATCH AS THEY STARE AT ME STUPIDLY TRYING TO GRASP THE UNDERSTANDING! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH " WEAK LINKS... unless u had pointed that out, i probably woulda never caught it.ok... it was good... gotta run.... bye!
person doodle
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What a wonderful surprise to find a new chapter. I had gotten the sense that Hermione's days were carefully structured and I delighted to read that in fact she had been recieving tutoring. As I prepare to evacuate for Gustave I am thankful that the Internet is everywhere and I can keep updated with your story.
person Muffy
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I so love the plotty bits. The natural evolution of their ideas is such a pleasure to read. I like it when, as a reader, I feel more like a voyeur in a slice of life rather than just reading. You do that so very well. Thanks for the updates!
person Pumkin
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i can just imagine Hermione going to talk margaret about that. the things she could learn. thanks for another informative chapter. i can guess what the next one will be about. hopefully. keep up the good work. update soon please.