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for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

by LaBibliographe

schedule September 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was delightful. It was quite amusing to see both Lucius and Hermione's impacts on the other dinner guests. The wives were shunning Hermione because all their husbands were looking at her and the husbands were too distracted by Hermione and broomstick aerodynamics to notice the effect that Lucius was having on their wives, hehe. Typical.

I just love Lucius and his calculating display of his goods. The line about the women staying friendly with Hermione long enough to find out what sex was like with Lucius had me chuckling. So did the jade columns.

I'm not sure either party found much to work with in terms of uncovering the identity of the blackmailer. Then again, they're a little distracted right now and haven't discussed it - which is fine with me. Bring on the kink. I will be waiting with a glass of wine, hehe.
schedule September 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Quite happily deviant, actually. I'm really enjoying Hermione's introduction to the kinkier side of things. Anyway, I love the Malfoy inside joke with the jade columns, and I like the work they both did at the dinner party. Of course those women hate Hermione, she's lovely, intelligent and is attached to Lucius. I'm surprised none of them were upset with her for talking to the husbands.
schedule September 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hahaha Lucius Charms, it sounds like a breakfast cereal, like Lucky Charms.

So let me guess on your next story. Lucius and Hermione will go through the veil again, only this time into the far future. You can call it the Veil Chronicles. lol
I think having them step into an alternate universe would be cool too, like the episode from Star Trek -- Mirror Mirror. In this opposite side of the mirror, everyone who is good is evil and everyone who is evil is good. Imagine a world with a very evil Dumbledore and Harry, and Voldemort trying to save the Wizarding World. LOL
I know, I know, you don
schedule September 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ooohh kink!!! I likes! Am looking forward to that.

Cock a la Lucius. Sounds delicious.

I've been wondering what the other husbands look like. These women are all falling over Lucius, so I imagine their hubbies to be middle-aged, stumpy & pot bellied. Perhaps a bit like Pettigrew or Fudge.

He's one smooth operator, our Lucius.
person Utopia
schedule September 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
RE: title; is 'Lucius's charms' just one big innuendo? lol!

Hell Yeah! Of COURSE I've got the playwitch issue! I also found one that was VERY naughty (we're talking full frontal nudity) for both Sev and Lucius. *giggle*

Go Lucius! Its an era where a wife must obey her husband (like Hermione will bow to Lucius's wishes!) - and if the husbands like her, then the wifes will follow!

LOL! trousers! he he! And Lucius grinds the rumour mill.

Does the contraceptive spell exist in this time (though they've cast it)? With the ladies gossiping about sex, surely they'll put two and two together and see there's no little ones.

Ooooh, Lucius in his shirt isn't quite as good as the 'domesticated Lucius' that S_G put in my head (Lucius slaving over a few saucepans in nothing but a frilly apron). It would have been the image of the week if I didn't already have that in my head!

HA HA! Sex toys on the mantelpiece! lol! Its like reading a smut novel in front of your Gran, and she doesn't realise because the cover doesn't have a half-naked man on the front! If they're an inside joke, I wonder if anyone else knows? I can imagine one of the ladies mentioning the 'odd ornaments' and Hermione having to keep a straight face while she makes up some nonsense about their function!

Erm... "although at the moment his thick length was semi-relaxed, lying quietly up over his thigh. erm... how can it lay quietly? Does it make noise normally? You make it sound like an animal or something that squeaks or purrs or mews or something!

*groans* Those puns were awful, duckie!
schedule September 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Your leaving it there??? Ah!!! Wicked woman!
Thanks for the heads up on the time line.
But will They confess their love for each other sooner, rather than later???
person lurky loo
schedule September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lucius isn't the only tease, love. And while I don't think I'll be dying of scurvy anytime soon, I am greatly anticipating the lemons ahead. Very, very sour, wonderfully raunchy lemons. Hee hee. I wonder if you'll ever do a Hermione Lucius story where Hermione is the one with the kinks to begin with. See, I am married to a lovely Remus Lupin type. He does three positions. Now don't get me wrong, he knows his business with those three positions, and it is quite, erm, profitable. But I'd love to see you write a story where it is Hermione that introduces Lucius to the depravities to be enjoyed with kinkiness.

Also, think I will just start reviewing as Mia, from now on. Lurky loo was in reference to your plea to lurkers to review. I was being cute, I'm done now. Just Mia. And again, I thank you for such wonderfully entertaining stories. You make my day lighter and sparklier. And may I order a dish of rising pantaloons as well? Or are you fresh out?

I honestly have absolutely no clue where you are going with this mystery. It could be anyone, and I LOVE that about this story. Usually I can make an educated guess, but not so much as a whisper of an hypothesis on this one. I am completely in the dark. Good one, love.

~Mia~
schedule September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lucius is quite the deviant though I think that only makes me love him more. It
schedule September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
More lemons in the next chapter, yay!

Nicely done, this one, too! And still no hints who's behind the blackmailing. You're letting us hang there! That is so mean (well, maybe it is meaner that we have to go without lemons after the expectations you raised for the end of the chapter...)! But I have the impression that they get into societies good graces, and that's good. They need to be trusted to do what they have to do!

Already impatient for your next update!
schedule September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was a great chapter. I look forward to reading more.