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for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

by LaBibliographe

person Mia
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ooh, wonderful. I love your twistiness. Whenever I hear the name Nesbitt though, I flash back to the children's movie Toy Story. Where Buzz Lightyear has lost it and is pointing at his head saying:"You see the hat? I'm Mrs. Nesbitt!" Every time your evil little man comes into a scene I get the giggles. Lol. Thanks.

~Mia~
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, my! What an interesting premise. I've never read anything like it. I'm looking forward to where you're heading with this! Great start!
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Where is everyone else? Were things so far gone that no one was looking for her? Is this all a wild dream? LOL... idk... I'm just going to keep reading.

Though seeing Lucius say "cow pie" had me snickering :)
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Of course they're bickering! It couldn't start any other way :)
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
An incredible chapter. I can't wait to read more to see what happens when Lucius learns the truth about the solicitor.
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm wondering when AND where, now? And Lucius using a French accent has to be a clue!

The imagery you use is one of your skills, I must say! I feel like I'm watching a movie!
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ooo LaBib! What an exciting chapter! So it
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
How interesting they went back and time, and THAT far back! Would anyone else have been transported back there, too?

Lucius' growing arousal is very promising!
person doodle
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Love it! Love it! Love it! What a twisty turn of plot. It was not one of the gazillion plot lines I had come up with... I love it when that happens!
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hopefully Lucius doesn't find success at that Brothel. The landlady seems rather observant...

Seems like you've set up a few things in this chapter.

Off to check out that recommended art!