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for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

by LaBibliographe

schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
another ace chapter. I loved them waking up together - poor Lucius, I think the temptation will be too much (well I'm hoping!) Although, Hermione might succumb soon as well. Totally looking forward to the next chapter.

onto that picture - wow! Isn't he just gorgeous? Those leather pants and gloves, the cane, those muscles and the dark mark - ooh! holy moly! I need a shower of the cool variety!
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness! That jpg was drool-worthy. And the gloves -- sweet goddess Nimue, it is always the gloves that do me in.

I am really enjoying this story. A very unique take on what happens to those who fall through the veil. I'm still a bit unclear on the forces taking over the Wizarding world that forced these two into this circumstance, but maybe I'm not reading it thoroughly enough.
person dragon37
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A very lovely picture. As usual a very good story, and I really can't wait to read more.
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Definitely worth a review picture and story. I love reading Lucius's inner monologe, just fascinating. As for the picture wow wow wow...
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I liked how you compared the eventuality of Hermione using the connection charm to find Lucius to a dementor dating tinkerbell. That was hilarious. I am having so much trouble imagining Lucius with black hair, change it back please...lol.
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah, good thinking, faking an identity from Debretts. I've got a feeling Lucius is going to slope off and eschew business in favour of pleasure, that bad man.

Oh my, this chapter was seething with sexual tension. I love the way you ratchet it up and up until they are about ready to burst. It is hot already, without fingers being laid on (other than the arm-smacking). I did enjoy Lucius embarrassing Hermione with his erection and perving on her Tahitian Sunset undies. Lovely stuff!
person Utopia
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
mmmmm nice picture... but I see him with broader shoulders, and minus those lovely snug britches... mmmmm.... naked Lucius *swoon*
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, is he ever going to get her to unbend?
person pittwitch
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Lucius, having to suffer the indignity of undergarments all for a pugnacious little kitten. Dear me, whatever shall he be forced to do?

Hermione attacking the book, even Debrett's, was so true to form.

Write on dearie, write on. Thanks for sharing, Pitt
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh Lucius just throw Hermione on the bed and make her scream! She