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I hope that there is an update soon.

Hope to read more soon.

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Great story!! look forward to the next update.

e-mail me an update please!oreo.fanfiction@live.com loved it

I know this is fanfiction, and I know that everyone has the right to create the story that they want to write but I must admit that I am more than a little confused as to how this turned out so far. Maybe it's just me as I seldom read slash fanfiction. I hope this doesn't sound like a flame because I've never sent a flame before and I don't want to start now. While it seems to be a common plot device in this branch of fanfiction (males able to become pregnate when they have a creature heritage and are submissive in personality) I can't quite understand why not only did Harry have two male mates, but his real parents were also two men who had been enemies probably since their first year of schooling. And because of this twist, you suddenly have Snape, Sirius, and Harry willingly talking with Voldermort, and Harry being totally willing to be his mate, and Greyback treated like an equal. This would make a heck of a lot more sense without Voldermort in the mix. I also kinda wish it wasn't Severus and Sirius together. To me, that makes as much sense as Peter Pettigrew getting a cat, then turning back into a rat for a game of tag. To me, it would have made more sense if maybe Harry was the son of Lilly and Severus, but that would mean that he'd still have a reason to hate Voldermort. Though with voldermort out of the picture in this story, you could still have Fenrir as Harry's mate. Considering the poor treatment of werewolves, it wouldn't take much for him to find a reason to rebel and take out the dark lord. And since Snape and James potter have the same coloring, it would explain Harry's resemblance to his "father" instead of all these glamors and plots of children stolen out of hospitals. I hate to say it but is sounds like a poorly written soap opera. It kinda feels like you are throwing things in just to make them fit the mold you want and to me, it makes the story less believable and less enjoyable. I hope you take these comments as constructive critisizm as I mean them to be. I hope you do take my thoughts into consideration. I don't expect you to change what you are writing because you have the right to express yourself however you chose. Still, I hope you think about it, use the feedback to improve as an author.

I would love to see more of both your stories please..

Awesome story. I love who you picked to be Harry's real parents. I look forward to reading more. Please let me know when you update.
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Very good loved it!!!!

Update soon!

I love this story so much! Can you please email me when you update? My email is digiron91@hotmail.com

This is one very interesting story!! Looking forward to the next update.