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hi, I've been following your story and i like the idea but you do really need a beta.
I'm willing to do that if you have not found anyone else. i can read, write, speak basic french so that may help. email me if you want at master_penguin82@yahoo.com.au with any chapters you want edited.

I believe you have a good story going and your translator should be complimented as I know its not an easy task, but you should probably try and get an English speaking beta-reader to help finish smoothing out the edges as you've quite a few spots that are very choppy or wrong words were used. The english language is a pain in the butt I know so what you've done so far is very good. Please don't be discouraged.

I kept reading even though at times I had a hard time figuring out what you were saying but I did and do enjoy the story so keep up the good work and I'll be waiting for your next update.

Just an FYI -Director should be Headmaster

Your story concept is really interesting.

I wish that you would have put in your summary that this was a translation of "Le fils cache de Lucius" and it would have caught my attention sooner! As it is, I'm happy to see that you've found someone to translate for you, and while I appreciate Tina's efforts, it is a little difficult to read. However, I can tell from the translation that the original story as written in French is well written, and I'm going to keep reading to see where you go with this. I wish my French skills were better, so that I could either read it in the original language, or help to translate. I know how difficult it can be to get the proper mood and nuance across when translating, having spent many years teaching English in Japan , so I really do appreciate the effort to translate this story to English. I am looking forward to the next chapter!

...i like...and cant wait to read more.

Good chapter but it seems that English is not your native language you should get a beta!

I like the story idea, but i can't follow it with all the errors. Or maybe that's the way it's supposed to be written.

I love it when Lucius is Harry's daddy!!!!!good start.

good chapter.

This story seems that it would be good, but it is very hard to read. I'm sorry to say, but it wasn't translated that well. I hope that the next chapter will be better.

AR