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September 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow i love it .. please please please update soon .. i would love to read more .. later for now
angel
angel
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September 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
more more greedy for more Mwhahahahahaaaaaa >:)
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September 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A Friendly Reminder
Just thought I'd leave you a note to let you know your disclaimer is lacking. According to the Terms of Service you need to include that you are in fact making no money from writing this story, and that you do not own the people involved. Also it helps if you specify the fandom you are writing about.
Even though this story is about fictional characters, it needs to be known that they are not yours and you
Just thought I'd leave you a note to let you know your disclaimer is lacking. According to the Terms of Service you need to include that you are in fact making no money from writing this story, and that you do not own the people involved. Also it helps if you specify the fandom you are writing about.
Even though this story is about fictional characters, it needs to be known that they are not yours and you
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August 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I realy like the story Keep writing more. It's awsome.
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August 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is a good story.. Has a nice idea behind it.. But it would be much better if the grammar errors would be corrected.
Since it's a bit hard to understand at times.. Because the words do not suit the rest of the senctense.
If you need a beta reader, I can do it for you.
Since it's a bit hard to understand at times.. Because the words do not suit the rest of the senctense.
If you need a beta reader, I can do it for you.
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July 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I adore harry being lucius' son fics BUT
You really really need a beta or to look over your sentences because most of them are soo bad that i cant read this story anymore because im tired of trying to translate and guess when you skip words or use just the wrong word in general. Narcissa is a girl and one time you refered to her as a him. Good Luck
You really really need a beta or to look over your sentences because most of them are soo bad that i cant read this story anymore because im tired of trying to translate and guess when you skip words or use just the wrong word in general. Narcissa is a girl and one time you refered to her as a him. Good Luck
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June 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think you might get a few more readers/reviewers if you would correct the title: Lucius' Hidden Son. I know a lot of people won't read something with a title spelled wrong, etc.
Keep writing,
Pitt
Keep writing,
Pitt
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June 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like the plot. I've read a couple of Snape as Harry's dad stories and I'm surprised how well the Lucius as dad plot works.
I think you'd get a lot more readers and loads of reviews if you'd find yourself a beta-reader, someone to check the grammar and spelling. The story (by the way, the title is spelled wrong) is quite hard to read.
I wish in no way to discourage you to continue, but you'll need some help with the language.
I think you'd get a lot more readers and loads of reviews if you'd find yourself a beta-reader, someone to check the grammar and spelling. The story (by the way, the title is spelled wrong) is quite hard to read.
I wish in no way to discourage you to continue, but you'll need some help with the language.
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
please update soon
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June 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon.