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Chapter 2: The first person takes a little getting used to and must be more difficult to write. It's hard limiting yourself to one character's viewpoint AND talking from their mind. Nice job.

At first I was a little concerned that Lucius had no moral compass at all (and I suppose he doesn't) so the way he stalked and kidnapped Hermione and the familial boundaries he blithely rolled over and smashed for his personal, depraved pleasure, made him even more of a villain who would prey on his own son's wife without a qualm.

Now we come to the twist. Lucius and Draco are two peas in a pod and apparently Hermione has jostled her way into their deviant lifestyle, enjoying it immensely. There is a question hanging - did Lucius know he was being set up? Either way, you've wickedly delivered us to chapter three (appropriately numbered, too).

Your particular Lucius is somewhat more uninhibited and self-serving than the median, but his canon character has a great deal of latitude to play with, so anything goes with the blond wizard. Draco has always had a dark, nasty side. Hermione is the surprise.

This chapter was certainly titillating, if a bit worrisome until one gets to the end. Whew! I feel a little better now. All parties are ready for the grand finale(?). INCLUDING ME!! Lovely chapter, nice writing, PW!

Oh My! You are truly evil for making this just a one-shot....but what fab one-shot it was. I was laughing out loud at the ending. Hermione did the deed with her father-in-law who was dressed (and then undressed!) in a white leather G-string. Oh, it is too fantastic.
Very yummy.

Now that was pleasantly twisted. :)

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Marvolous Ladies

Aw Pittwitch this was lovely!

You really do have a wonderful, bendy-curvy way of writing that makes me want to read your sentences out loud.

Ooooo......bad Lucius, shagging his daughter-in-law before the wedding! LMAO Oh, my goodness....would gladly pay any amount of money to have Snape strip for me!!!!!!!


HAHAHA!!!!!!


SG

Chapter 1 (complete): I felt like purring myself, wishing I could see the dark and light wizards dancing. Lucius was at his erotic best in his private alcove, manipulating Hermione into both the best position and the best release of her young life. Her new husband will have quite the large codpiece to fill. Hot story and great smut. I like this one-shot just as it is. Lucius is the consummate self-centered bastard

Ooh. So nasty. I love it.

Wow. You wrote this in only three days? Unbelievable. It takes me ages to get through those kinds of descriptions, especially with the alliteration you use. Well done.