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More please. This is really good so far.

Oo!! that was a suprise!! tom riddle the headmaster and he will be able to stay close to his mate!!

I cannot get enough of this story, I just love the plot line and I am really looking forward to the next chapter.

Hi, I have noticed that your writing has improved sice you began this story. Here's a writers tip, it helps to read you work aloud back to yourself slowly. The idea is if there is an error in spelling or grammer as you read verbatim the sentence will not make sense. It's sad that you don't plan on pairing Remus with anyone, I was going to suggest Fenrir Greyback ^__^ I also wanted to point out that I noticed you sometimes throw in plot devices and don't use them. you want to watch out for those since sometimes a plot device you threw in earlier may cause a contradiction later. *When Harry was dropping off his gift of roses you mentioned there was something slithering about outside the bedroom, but you never went anywhere with it. *When Harry went out with Draco to Hogsmead and stopped at Gringotts he asked the goblin in charge of his accounts to look for tampering, but then Harry found out about Dumbledore's stealing by other means and he never did get that letter. *After going to all that trouble to pick furniture out, and it was a very descriptive scene, Harry never does set it all up, (we know what he did with the bed ;P) he also never uses it (save for the mattress). *Did Severus actually ever make that potion to get rid of the scars on Harry's back? Hmm, that's all my questions for now. I look forward to your next chapter.
Taa,
Rena

Very hot threesome!

Really? I think it'd be adorable, if slightly crowded. I like Voldemort in this chapter, he's so protective, and his death threats to Lucius were veiled well. Okay, maybe not death, but definitely severe pain. Also, the scene they walked into in the library made me crack up. Thanks for a great chapter, please update soon. Cheers!

Hmm.. I wonder who the spy is.. i'll keep guessing..

Can't wait for next chapter!

Love this story!

First off, I hope you feel better, and get well soon.

The next thing is I hope that we see some Snape and Luce action going on here!
I like the Chapter and can not wait for more to come my way!!!!!!!!!

More please...I'm sure that would have been an interesting sight to walk into...lol...please update soon.