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This may be a bit late, and not important to the content of the story, but you may want to recheck the formatting of your chapters and edit them if possible. Your chapter formatting is not consistent, and it makes your story a bit bothersome to read, especially on mobile. I do Luke the content so far, but having to flip a phone every chapter affects reading flow and increases irritability. II know I have quit stories for less, and I don't want anyone to miss out for a silly thing like that. :)

Interesting take on somewhat trite and overdone themes. However, there was something in this chapter that drove me absolutely nuts: how much money Harry drops on his clothing. You state that muggle clothing starts at a minimum of 15 galleons for a *piece* and then Harry gets 16 pieces of muggle clothing that would be (bare minimum, not even taking into account that pants and definitely the leather jackets are going to be way more than the bare minimum) 240 galleons. That's not including 6 sets of robes. It's a stupid detail, but I'm an editor so it really bugged me.

Otherwise, I'm interested in reading more.

I liked it

awww this was such an awesome story! yeah there were a few puntuation issues, but all in all, it was excellent. i loved the plot (and the plot twists), and you did a great job with your take on all the different characters. keep up the great work! :)

Loved it. Great story. You should so another with Harry and Voldemort.

okay.... i don't know if i've reviewed this store before... if i haven't i should have but what i really wanna see is Dante and his mate! *nods* Yup.... I wanna see Dante all grown up with his awesome shapeshifting mate..... *nods* just so you know...

Loving this story. There is only one thing bothering me, I think Harry would not use Voldemort but Tom when speaking to his mate. I think Voldemort is more a title than a name. Just me.

i love this story so far, and i know that you probably won't read this, but just in case you ever do...the only problem i have with your story is in chapter 28, when reading skeeter's article, you kind of insinuate that hogwarts students could have been affected by the killings in the united states, but hogwarts is in england, so they really wouldn't care.... here's the quote if you're wondering where i got this '* And finally in the states just over thirty were killed during 1692 and 1693.

The last one doesn't seem as bad as the others, but it is more personal because there were local wizards, that may have even attended Hogwarts, that were killed during those trials.' like i said, hogwarts is in england, so the USA killings wouldn't have been any hogwarts students....

not trying to be all snide and stuff, just trying to point out a

*trying to point out a mistake (sorry, no idea why that last word got cut off in my previous review. like i said though, i loved this story, just thought i'd mention that one thing....)

good story