rate_review Reviews

I think this story was WONDERFULLY done, i love the pov switches, i love that snapes desire for draco took me by surprise, but in a great way. I scoffed at the veela bit at first, but you really committed to it and so I was able to go with it. And I just LOVE ron's section of the story, i thought that was really really well done, and in character and you don't make him a blithering idiot. It was hot, it was sweet it was sad, it was GREAT!!

Chapter 5 please!!!!

Wow! So i've read all the sequels and I just love how you get into Draco and Harry's head. I also appreciate how you don't overtly feminize either of the boys too to much and end up making them some sort of sugary Yaoi version of themselves. I like how we see Draco and Harry confronting the non-consensuality of their relationship from the beginning, and how we get to see harry dependent on draco for his emotional well being. I must say I feel as though the sequel chapters have not been as "close" so to speak as the first chapter, as in i don't often feel like i'm INSIDE the character's head. But, your descriptive language and the pacing and the way that you really keep everyone in character (especially hermione) is really great! I'm anxious to see when Draco going to confide in Harry about his time with snape, and what the veela in harry will do about that. OH, that was something else I liked about the last few chapters, that you didn't just introduce the veela element and then back off, but we see it consistently coming up and adding a flavor or dimension to the story.
This was a great read, I hope you update soon!

Thank you for updating once more. Please do so again when you have the chance. P.S. you often forget to put spacing between letters of words, the 'm' in the word 'my' (you forgot it in Seq-4), and you often misuse the word 'red' in writing. Red is a color, read is the past tense of reading. Sorry about that, but just felt that those things needed to be addressed. Thank you for posting, you're doing a great job of writing this fic overall.

WHAT AN AMAZING STORY. I CAN'T BELIEVE I FOUND THIS.

oh, very nice =D will there be a next chapter?

I know you said it wasn't betaed, and usually I don't read fic with lots of grammatical errors, but this story was quite intriguing.
I suspect that English is not your first language? (the switching of the 'V's and the 'W's was a clue). Regardless, I was quite enthralled by this story. There were many unexpected surprises (I so did not see Snape's infatuation coming) and some harrowing, angst-ridden, touching and even infuriating moments. This was really well done. Little details, like Draco's pyjama preference, made the characters more real to me.

Here are some of my favorite lines:

"Snape just stood there and gave me time to think and Ron time to fume."

"I was right; I usually liked to be right, but not this time."

"He is so severe. No pun intended."

I shall have to look into the next parts. If you have any interest in a beta for this fic, I would be interested, though I won't have time till late December.

tsuj

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I hope you update soon this is so good.

Soooo need chapter 4!!!