rate_review Reviews

will draco love her? it is crazy but its hot. ooh,i want to read the steamy scene on the next chapter

u should write more,not just focus on the sex but other things like draco and her when sex is not involve and describe more about draco,what he truly feel. Ofcourse more and more sex. I was hoping for blaise but lucius is hot as well

OH I LOVE IT SO MUCH! IT SO HOT HOT HOT HOT!! damn,u seriously need to finish this story.. keep wit the bdsm and hardcore male dom stuff,thats the hottest thing in da world..so r blaise or lucius will join draco??

i like the slave and the master stuff,this is no exception.U should write the story longer.it will be more fun to read. Brooklyn?thats an odd name,watevr as long as she is submissive and not a free mouthing bitch like hermione.Keep up the good work.

draco is too hars on her but it turns me on because he is draco the sex god.Will he love her at the end of the story?

he scream alot dats kind of weird for a dud. She should be screaming more. i love this story.

OK, there are parts of this that are kinda sexy, and parts of it that are really over the top. It kinda seems like a Mary Sue, which is fine if you make sure you get Draco's character down better. I don't see him yelling that much during sex. It's not a bad idea, just need a little more subtley. You might also want to get a beta for grammar and spelling (I have this problem too). I think you should continue it, but maybe tone down Draco's character a bit.