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by sexkitty85

person Sera21
schedule March 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Review of first chap: So clearly this is some PWP. Not that I mind. There are parts that are pretty hot but there are some parts that I had to wonder. Like why does Draco announce when he is going to cum like in a porno? The nice part about the written word is that people don't have to ( unrealistically) announce it every time they come. I mean sure, theres the occasional, I'm gonna come you dirty bitch...or something like that but why every time and why is he shouting it? You that proud of yourself mate? Also, Brooklyn has to be the most un-english name EVER. Its very very Americana. and I hate me some americana in teh middle of a english fic. So yeah, I kinda hate this OC XD
person Sera21
schedule March 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
So , having read chapter 3 now, I have to ask, does Draco ever clean her back hole before he fucks her? Because this chapter said she just woke up and then anal. Ew. I mean it was plenty hot but do try to be a bit realistic...like a cleaning spell or an enema or something...
schedule November 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this is probably the most hard core i've ever read....
schedule October 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The end?
schedule April 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
omg i love this story please write more
schedule February 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
At first I was jealous of the muggle slave since she got to have both Draco AND Lucius but that last chapter 'rape' changed my mind. I wanna know how Draco will react when he finds out. Hopefully he will stick up for her and not bow down to his father. noonienoodles@yahoo.com.au if you wanna message when you update.
person miakitty
schedule February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh that was brilliant,keep update. (draco seriously need to come and save her before more bad things happens)
person kitryder
schedule February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Where have i been sexkitten? i've been waiting here forever baby,i'm not leaving this story until it completely finish. Rape,can anything be hotter than that,i dont think so. Kitty dont make me wait okey,u took a long time to post this chapter,u know its killing me.
schedule January 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
okey,love it..too smut,i dont actualy know what i want. and i'm not gonna say,u should add this and that,at this point,i just want to read the story from u the way u like it. I dont write because my idea suck and i always confuse with what i like. I do know i like draco,and blaise and bdsm thing. watever it is,dont kill anybody. Dark is ok,but when death involve,it can be creepy
person HoneyB9
schedule January 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
omg!!!! i dont epect that to happend,where is draco?he must save her from lucius. Lucius is so evil!go pick other muggle to fuck