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for Giving and Taking

by holden88

person Delfin
schedule December 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg! ^.^

its gettin even hotter *drools :D
person Delfin
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh man, me wants more! :D
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow... those last few paragraphs were got... my face actally felt flushed! i can't wait for the next chapter. please update soon!!!
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Please update soon.
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really liked this and I look forward to read more. I am glad Severus can see both her mind and body, and finding what he sees attractive! I am quite sure Ron the prat will "discover" Hermione at some point, just don't in any way let Ron sucsess in any advances, the Hermione/Ron pairing is the most off-putting paring in the HP-fandome, I really can't stand it:-))
Update again soon!!!
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very good, I did catch one typo 'writer' I think. I had a beta once who told me that 'writing is painting a picture with words'. I think you may want to add a bit more description, but overall a very good start!
person Delfin
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow very promising beginning :D

plz update and post more of this story :]
person Delfin
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh my 2 chapters yeiii :D

im really into this story :)

person amsev
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm looking forward to Snape's reaction to Hermione rushing in with her hair all wild...
schedule December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like where this story is going! You write really well and I hope you make a nice meaty stryline out of it!

Well done!