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I am reviewing your story: wow. Just wow. That was a serious trip indeed. It was like you just knew what was coming when reading through each chapter but you hope you are wrong. Its so serious and crazy. It really had me going.

I would like you to know that I was enjoing your story so much that I got in trouble at work for reading it and not doing my work.

Definitely could use a re-read and edit but that stuff wasn't to terrible. And just wow, it was so feeling. I really felt whst I was reading. And I loved Severus' threat. Positively evil.

Beautiful story ^^ thank you

I'm going to start off by saying that consensual incest isn't wrong. Consensual sex of any kind is not wrong. There doesn't really need to be love, just lust, but I think it makes the experience better.

When I first read the rape scenes (Severus didn't really have a choice and that's really what rape is, the removal of the victim's choice), I wondered why they were important. And then I read the very last chapter, and I think I understand a bit more why they were important. I don't think I'd call that love, though, I think I'd call that an obsession, a twisted mockery of what real love is about.

I don't know if this is one of my favorite stories, but the chemistry between the characters felt very real and I enjoyed that part of it. Good job. :)

I really like that story even if the end is sad with Lily's death. Will you write a sequel or scenes of this story from Harry's point of view? There are a few scenes that would be interesting to read from his point of view. Like that scene in the alley, at the restaurant, when Severus found out that Harry was in love with him or when Lily told Severus about Harry and Draco. That could be interesting!

I stumbled upon your story, so, wht I liked about it - a different AU, original in it's own way, menaing that I haven't seen this kind of AU before. Those little foreboading sentences in the end of most of the chapters, they kind of make your unique style. And I enjoyed the story in whole as well.
What I didn't like so much. Well, Lucius' blackmail, kind of too much, easier to tell Lily about drugging than do what Lucius asks - but that's my personal opinion. And I think that probably you could go through the story one more time and make sure that everything is in character. Like, there was a place where Dumbledore said 'kick of the team' - rather informal speech for a headmaster. But it doesn't matter much of course. Overall, good job!

You may remember reviewing at the very beginning of this story, telling you that I wasn't sure that I would continue reading this fic due to the theme. It wasn't a flame, just an observation and I did in fact comment that your writing skills were excellent.

I would just like to inform you that I have indeed continued to follow the story through each chapter as posted and although at times I'v,e found it difficult to read (subject matter not writing style) I can honestly say, hand on heart, that I have enjoyed reading it. This concept must have seriously challenged you as a writer and I don't believe that I could have undertaken such a project. Kudos for that!

You endured some serious critisism early on, in response to the Japanese business man, which I believe was taken completely out of context by a number of reviewers. However, on a positive note, I was personally glad for you that so many came out in your defense. I am a great believer of freedom of expression and artistic license and I for one did not interpret your representation of Mr Leiwong (spelling?) as a generalisation that all Japanese men/business men are paedophiles. By that comparison in the HP fandom, all British people are child abusers (physically abusive) because the Dursley's abused Harry, which of course is preposterous.

I hope you are planning on writing more stories in the future and look forward to reading them.

Very good story.

I am so sad this is over but it ended well. A contrite Lucius, a dead Lily, a punished James, and Harry and Severus together. Happiness. Yayedness.

I love this story, I have not review it yet but you have to know that everyday I was looking for the next chapter^^ And to answer your question, I will say that in every culture incest is forbiden, because children have to go out of their own house to find a mate so that there is no problem with the blood. We know what can happen when there has been to manny incestuous wedding in a bloodline, history is full of crazy princes and so on. But here your are not talking about that, you are talking about relationships that society frowns uppon even if there is not a direct connection. Lets just say fuck to society and enjoy love, it is so hard to find it. . . And as you said we are only human!

(I know I made a lot of mistakes, but I am french so dont kill me^^)

WOW! that was a really really sad ending but i loved it! I love the way you made like a book he was reading to us oh you are awsome you have a great story and it was awsome i look forward to reading other things by you.. Keep up the good work and hope to read more.

wow it was all fine and dandy until the very last chapter.