rate_review Reviews

Just wondering.

Are you using your story for advertisements?
And why keep shifting chapters?


I wonder when you'd get around actual story. Hopefully by 10th chapter I guess

I was so looking forward to this story.

First, You updated it so late. Second, you din't do anything in the first real chapter. Third, your spacing and grammer; You need use periods rather than commas.

Please properly start the story. And please space it properly. You might want to ask for a beta.


I know you might say "don't like it, don't read it". I was waiting for story but update was so late and then chapter wasn't very good.

Please take this review positively and try and improve it. Frequent updates would be better but I guess that depends on when you get time to update.

Looking for next chapter; hopefully with the changes

good chapter

God this story is so.. so... bad that I just can't resist reviewing. I won't point out that all characters are completely ooc, because it's an AU story and it's normal on this website. However, taking actually staring the story in ch. 3 is, amusing to say the least. Your writing style leaves much to be desired and judging by the way your sentences tend to be confusing, becaues of missing words, I assume that you did not even proofread this stuff. I dislike the general idea of this story and in my opinion you should take a break and read some actually good fanfiction before trying again.

Oh and stop your ADD-attention-whoring, thx!

Sounds good; get on with it.

Slave!Ginny is usually quite fun.

This could be a good story. think you could throw molly weasley madam pomphery and the libarian in there
update soon.

This sounds like it will be a fucking ace story, I can't wait wait for you to start.

Ummm... Do you think that you can start the story by 5th chapter? You could've put allt hat information in the first chapter, you know.

Oh and make it Harry centric. No Ron or anybody else. He alone. It'll work out really good. There aren't many only Harry stories.

Having said that, i AM looking foward to the story

OMG, petunia and pansy,no way...i will run out.narcissa will be fun in some way, but bella will be really creepy. she get sometime in azkaban too...i hve see alot of superharry.

i like more my "Evil Challenge".sorry for my poor english--_--

Hi, since it is porn without plot, you won't include other people?? If ya will, can ya put Ron and Hermione?? Harry as Master, Hermione and Ron as mistre and master, or his lover. Since ya put a title that JK used, Harry Potter and.., it seems it would be long, not short. Hope it would be a long story.