rate_review Reviews

I don't understand how this was supposed to be a setup by Pansy. And why is Pansy friends with benefits with Draco, when she knows that Draco will get back with Hermione eventually? As they have broken up more than a couple of times, but always found the way back to each other? And Hermione actually still friends with Pansy even though she fucks Draco? Why on earth would Hermione be friends with someone like that? And why would Hermione want Draco back, if he goes and fucks one of her (apparently close) friends, when they are temporarily broken up? Hermione would have more pride than that. She would tell Draco to go to hell and to take his slut with him.
This story makes no sense whatsoever, sorry. The story is not very thought through at all.

Again, a nice sweet story! Now, get to work on BCD, eh? :D

What a great one shot! I really love how Draco and Hermione both had cold feet. It was really sweet.

That was a cute and fun story! Thanks!

NOW GET BACK TO WORK ON BEHIND CLOSED DOORS!

;-)

it was cute!

This is a very nice one-shot--you keep the reader surprised, but in a natural manner. The reader thinks it's going to be a fun but standard cliche story, and then you substitute something a bit deeper. Volunteer psychoanalysis from their friends is quite amusing. Their last-minute panic before the wedding was very apropos; I especially liked that bit.

I'm a wee bit confused about why so many people needed to be obliviated. Did Draco use magic to get into the dressing room? Or are they just loud? I'm also confused about how it was a setup by Pansy and Ginny, since Draco seemed to have found Hermione on his own. But it's not important, and explanations would probably drag the story down.

You might want to change "surnames" to "last names" when Ginny and Pansy are lecturing them? I'm not sure about the U.K., but in the States, no one actually uses "surname" in speech, only in writing.

brilliant :)

Ahh, too cute. The fighting gets so out of hand right before the wedding, or buying a house, LOL.