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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh gosh. That was great. I'd love to see more, and I think to suit the theme, a more sadder ending would be appropriate. The thing about it is, that with strong emotions like love, pain comes hand in hand. So we can't have all these happy stories without a few angsty ones to counter them. And I believe you've done and excellent job!
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
MOOOOORRRRRRE!
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh how sad! I sooo hope there's more! Please tell me there's more! Why did Draco behave that way?
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh God, please tell me you'll continue this! Please? I'll.. uh... give you fanart or something? XD
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December 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was beautiful. My heart was breaking for both of them. I kind of feel like this is deserving to be more than a one shot though. It feels incomplete.
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December 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A couple of little errors in there, and they spoil the context of some sentences.
This began so sweet, turned sweeter and then went sour for the couple. The only thing I'd like to see is a description of the setting - where are they? Is it their own home? Is it Grimmauld Place? How old are they? I'm presuming they're out of Hogwarts?
Other than the above: 10/10
This began so sweet, turned sweeter and then went sour for the couple. The only thing I'd like to see is a description of the setting - where are they? Is it their own home? Is it Grimmauld Place? How old are they? I'm presuming they're out of Hogwarts?
Other than the above: 10/10
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December 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You are going to write more of this right? Right??
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December 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Nicely done! Now I need to go eat some chocolate to cheer me back up...