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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Evil Cliff Hanger! I can't wait to read more of this wonderful story. When ever one finds out it was Ron that had done this to her, he better have is running shoes on lol. Especially if Snape gets a hold of him.
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Write your story. It has merit. But, please, do not fall into that crap about holding the story ransom for so many reviews. Write because you want to! Begging for reviews is so juvenile and really makes me turn off to the story and the author.
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thank You;) -- This is just picky stuff... at the top of the page where your A/N are, double space down to the chapter. Then start your chapter number, why not add the chapter title since you have titles, and then double space [at the least] again before you start the actual first line of the chapter. Presentation is always nice!
[In ch.1, you have Ginny at the party twice.]
[In ch.1, you have Ginny at the party twice.]
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good for Harry beating the shit out of Ron, I still think he needs to die. And thank God Mrs and Mr Weasley didnt side with Ron and shelter him. Thank God Snape was there to help her again. Does he have feelings for her.
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Isn't Harry going to get in trouble for beating the crap out of Ron?
I think the first three chapters are pretty strong, but the fourth and fifth focus a bit too much on Harry? Intriguing plotline; I'd like to see where this is headed.
I think the first three chapters are pretty strong, but the fourth and fifth focus a bit too much on Harry? Intriguing plotline; I'd like to see where this is headed.
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow. I love this story it is very intriguing and you do a great job of hooking your reader.
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
interesting story... i'm looking forward to seeing where you will take this!
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December 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon'' I love it. Pleaseee more now.
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December 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well I like it. Very interesting start. I can't wait to see where you go from here. Well done!
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December 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You need to get a beta and learn to break up paragraphs. A paragraph should not be a whole screen long. It makes the story too hard to read.