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December 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 7: I like that Lucius and Hermione have a ways to go before they approach a tentative friendship, let alone any romance. This is much more believable. He is a rather arrogant snob so far, isn
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December 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This was a great chapter. I can't wait to read more soon.
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December 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. Go Hermione on the French! Take that Lucius. lol Can't wait to read more!
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December 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story is extremely well written and double yay! for being DH complaint!! I'd actually been lookig for a story like this, one that was DH complaint and had Hermione with a Malfoy... so it works, right? Good job. I was sad to see that you only have 7 chapters up so hurry along and go write some more!
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November 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story. I can't wait to read more soon.
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November 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story! Please add more soon
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November 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapters 1-5: Well-written and very entertaining. So far the tale seems mostly character-driven which I always enjoy. I think I'm hanging onto the shifts in time. I assume neither Hermione nor Lucius has announced their marriage (of fifteen years?) to anyone? Draco is returning and things will escalate I guess. If Hermione has been hiding her marriage for 15 years from her friends, how did she do that? Does everyone think she's Lucius' secretary? I'm a bit confused about that.
It's very interesting. I appreciate the good grammar and punctuation.
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Ch. 4 - one word - coarse should be course. "...she felt the shiver of awareness coarse through his body."
It's very interesting. I appreciate the good grammar and punctuation.
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Ch. 4 - one word - coarse should be course. "...she felt the shiver of awareness coarse through his body."
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November 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I must say, I'm impressed. I've been hoping for a DH-compliant fan fiction that didn't exclusively put Ron and Hermione together; while I'm sure they'd be a cute "high school" couple, between the lack of common interests, completely different personalities and their ugly arguments I never saw it working out.
I like the style you've used, the flashback format. It adds depth to the story, letting us know that things eventually end well - except we don't know the friends' reactions to the union - but still leaves room for the reader to be intrigued. Also, bringing up the very real issue of the age difference - not just Lucius angsting about it but actually having it shown late at night - is a great touch. Though, to be honest, if he only has this problem after three times in one night, I'm pretty sure he doesn't have much to worry about.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
I like the style you've used, the flashback format. It adds depth to the story, letting us know that things eventually end well - except we don't know the friends' reactions to the union - but still leaves room for the reader to be intrigued. Also, bringing up the very real issue of the age difference - not just Lucius angsting about it but actually having it shown late at night - is a great touch. Though, to be honest, if he only has this problem after three times in one night, I'm pretty sure he doesn't have much to worry about.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
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November 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
okay i have just found your story i dont know how i missed it! well...i just love the story!!! :) i am so looking forward to a lot more i am so enjoying it and i love lucius and hermione they are so much fun to play with and i really cant wait to see how draco takes things :)(to bad i cant do a sly smile) question how long have lucius and hermione been married? and will you eventually tell us? please do take too long to update i am really looking forward to the next chapter! ;)
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November 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
@6 good story i hope to read more soon
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