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for Hidden in Plain Sight

by Katay

schedule December 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was so sad. But I have to agree. They're too good of friends to have one of "those" breakups. I think you wrote it rather well. Can't wait for the next update!
schedule December 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I came across your story today and I am really enjoying it. I like how you go back from where Lucius and Hermione met to the future Lucius and Hermione. And if I am guessing right, I think it may be Draco who walked in on them. Looking forward to the next update.
schedule December 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
First, I want to tell you that I love your story. You make the AU quite believalbe and plausible. Just one small thing for chapter 7: It's "Comment faites-vous?". Otherwise, I think your French is very good - but I'm not a native either, I've only learned it in school for 4 years.
person Citten
schedule December 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
well it looks like draco is in for a suprise. well now i really want another chapter and soon! i wonder who daddy is for lavenders baby- i have a feeling rons in BIG trouble. :) i really hope that the problem hermione has is not that she cant have children cause that would suck! well i love everything so far and i am dying for more! PLEASE!!!! :)
person DB1
schedule December 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
@7 a great chapter, update soon

*DB*
schedule December 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh... SNAP. THAT was a twist I didn't expect. Now, in most cases I don't really like when a person splits apart a canon couple by making one of them completely inconsiderate, but Ron really is a prat, and Hermione doesn't seem to have the patience to deal with him. Honestly, I don't see what they have in common, and you seem to be of the same opinion. You show it really well.

I assume that this is the death knell for Ron and Hermione's relationship; that'll happen. I can't wait to see what's wrong with Hermione, how she and Lucius will be brought together, when she'll get a real position, and right now, I especially want to see George recover, even a little. This is very well-written, and I'll be anxiously awaiting the next installment.
schedule December 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow great job! I wonder who the father is? Please add more
schedule December 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh you wicked wicked thing you! What a way to leave us! PLEASE update soon!
schedule December 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter. I can't wait to read more soon.
schedule December 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Goodness, it just keeps getting better and better. I really want Ron to pay something fierce for what he's doing. I can not wait to see what you have coming in the next chapter, especially with Lavender's pregnancy and the mysterious man at the door.