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January 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ohhhhhh fuck that was hot.
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November 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OK first up, I'd like to abuse the reviewer who left such a nasty review for this. Damn it!! I hate flamers, go to hell you moron. OK moving on.
There are some relevant points to be taken from that flamer tho. No I'm not saying this is shit like him, I don't think it is. It's very well done, and I can see that a lot of effort has gone into it. But you do need a Beta reader to go over and fix grammatical mistakes, typos, a few miss-spelt terms, like the St Mungo's thing. They are all mistakes easy enough to make, but a beta would go over this and fix it.
Now, I would offer to beta, and I intend to offer to beta your work, BUT I can't do anything for the next two weeks. I've promised a few people beta jobs after November 30th, which is when my work load decreases considerably, and I'd be happy to add in you work to a list of things to beta. It could take me a little while to work through it, but if your willing, I could beta most of what you've already written and anything new you come up with before you post it. Believe me, a beta makes everything so much better! (no pun intended) But I do not profess to catch every mistake there is, which is why some people opt to have two or three beta's read their stuff, so that in the end it's absolutely perfect. The other good things about beta's is if they highlight what they've changed, which I do depending on how much change was required, you can learn from it, what you're doing wrong, what to change in the future, etc, so then you start to pick up better habits too. You can try to apply the beta's fixes into your own work before sending it to be beta'ed. I'm also nearly always on my computer so I would be a fairly fast beta, depending on how fast you want it back, as the faster I beta something, the less perfect it will be, but I try to do each chapter/document as I get it sent to me. But this would all be after Nov 30. So send me an email at phoenix_fire_cat@yahoo.com if you'd like to take me up on the offer to beta, but I wont actually be doing any until two weeks from now. But feel free to chat with me on this, or even create a list of what you'd like done in what order, or send over copies of the documents for me to get to eventually.
So, on the actual story (god this is turning out a long review, but I love receiveing them so I try to lead by example in writing them) I really liked the idea. At first I had a suspicion that it really was Fred or George polyjuiced as Ron and they were doing it to trick Percy, but it turned out really kinda sweet. I'd love to see Percy trying to explain that hickey at work!! LOL. And I never really pegged Ron as a dominant kind, although his whole physic is rather large and dominating. Well then. I loved the story!!!
so send me an email in regards to the beta, and I'll hopefully talk to you later
~gorgeousbowneyes
There are some relevant points to be taken from that flamer tho. No I'm not saying this is shit like him, I don't think it is. It's very well done, and I can see that a lot of effort has gone into it. But you do need a Beta reader to go over and fix grammatical mistakes, typos, a few miss-spelt terms, like the St Mungo's thing. They are all mistakes easy enough to make, but a beta would go over this and fix it.
Now, I would offer to beta, and I intend to offer to beta your work, BUT I can't do anything for the next two weeks. I've promised a few people beta jobs after November 30th, which is when my work load decreases considerably, and I'd be happy to add in you work to a list of things to beta. It could take me a little while to work through it, but if your willing, I could beta most of what you've already written and anything new you come up with before you post it. Believe me, a beta makes everything so much better! (no pun intended) But I do not profess to catch every mistake there is, which is why some people opt to have two or three beta's read their stuff, so that in the end it's absolutely perfect. The other good things about beta's is if they highlight what they've changed, which I do depending on how much change was required, you can learn from it, what you're doing wrong, what to change in the future, etc, so then you start to pick up better habits too. You can try to apply the beta's fixes into your own work before sending it to be beta'ed. I'm also nearly always on my computer so I would be a fairly fast beta, depending on how fast you want it back, as the faster I beta something, the less perfect it will be, but I try to do each chapter/document as I get it sent to me. But this would all be after Nov 30. So send me an email at phoenix_fire_cat@yahoo.com if you'd like to take me up on the offer to beta, but I wont actually be doing any until two weeks from now. But feel free to chat with me on this, or even create a list of what you'd like done in what order, or send over copies of the documents for me to get to eventually.
So, on the actual story (god this is turning out a long review, but I love receiveing them so I try to lead by example in writing them) I really liked the idea. At first I had a suspicion that it really was Fred or George polyjuiced as Ron and they were doing it to trick Percy, but it turned out really kinda sweet. I'd love to see Percy trying to explain that hickey at work!! LOL. And I never really pegged Ron as a dominant kind, although his whole physic is rather large and dominating. Well then. I loved the story!!!
so send me an email in regards to the beta, and I'll hopefully talk to you later
~gorgeousbowneyes
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November 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Shew!!! *fans self* bloody hot in here! How nice on Ron to help Percy out. Will Percy get the chance to return the favour???
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November 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Also, about the flamer, chicken shit didn't even leave email. Don't worry, yes there were some grammatical errors (Prostrate) ;) But not a big deal at all really, I can overlook that!!!
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November 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
luvhp: what are you talking about hun? She or he DID leave an email and I wrote them back and told them what I was feeing at the moment. I was very hurt and pissed off. I also left them a short reply here lol. I'm glad they never wrote back because I was so angry. Anyway glad for the review hun, and thanks for joining my site:) I'm not sure if he'll return the favor. the story is over. I may write a sequel not sure. But I have a good idea for another ron and percy story. And ya my grammar is not the best but its not that bad.. And I warn everyone. Also since you like weasleycest you should read The lying slutty runt....I dare you to cum ..destroying the heart of the family and our rps on my site.all weasleycest. thanks again
angela
angela
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November 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
gorgeousbowneyes: hey hun I already sent you an email with thanks and my answer, just wanted to thankyou again for the nice reply:)
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November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
What the hell is this crap!!! You don't even know how to spell. this is a small list of the things that were wrong with this "fic"
1. St.Mungles wat is that,its saint St.Mungo's you moron
2.rons eyes are blue (just like all the weasleys) not emerald(like harrys)
3.never in harry potter has anyone ever said "Oh golly"
4.i personaly enjoy incest fics (I don't condone it in real life)but this flowed incredibly... amazingly... badly.
5.In a nutshell this story sucked ass...not only ass but fat,hairy,smelly ass.
6.im done ranting and this is just advice, stop posting fics without profreading them first
1. St.Mungles wat is that,its saint St.Mungo's you moron
2.rons eyes are blue (just like all the weasleys) not emerald(like harrys)
3.never in harry potter has anyone ever said "Oh golly"
4.i personaly enjoy incest fics (I don't condone it in real life)but this flowed incredibly... amazingly... badly.
5.In a nutshell this story sucked ass...not only ass but fat,hairy,smelly ass.
6.im done ranting and this is just advice, stop posting fics without profreading them first
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November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sorry if you don't like my story. But you don't have to be so rude and hurtful. I advise you to find a better story next time you don't like a story and do not haressess the writer. People work very hard on these stories.
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November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow.....I just creamed myself....
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November 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMGS......O_O O_O O_O! I think this is my favorite story from you by far! IT WAS SO BLOODY HOTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!
OMG!!! The simple fact that it had Percey's "little brother" fucking him and welcoming him the "faerie" world it whfhfhffhfhhdisiiffjfjjf gah, gah, gah!!! *salivates* Oh, that was best pice of literature! LMAO!!! Huggles!
OMG!!! The simple fact that it had Percey's "little brother" fucking him and welcoming him the "faerie" world it whfhfhffhfhhdisiiffjfjjf gah, gah, gah!!! *salivates* Oh, that was best pice of literature! LMAO!!! Huggles!