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June 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm going ga-ga on this story. Keep it up cause there's not enough Cedric/Harry! Finish story please.
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January 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Really needs to be edited over. There are a lot of grammar problems. For example, you don't use commas where they need to be used, you don't capitalize names all of the time, there are quite a few run-on sentences and your tenses change quite a lot. All of these things are fixable, if you only just re-read your work. If you read it to yourself, you'd realize how awkwardly a lot of it was worded.
But it wasn't all bad. I think maybe the romance bit was a little too rushed. I don't see Cedric and Harry confessing their love to each other so soon. That could have really used more development. But it was cute and the smut wasn't all bad. It was a mildy entertaining read. Thanks for sharing!
But it wasn't all bad. I think maybe the romance bit was a little too rushed. I don't see Cedric and Harry confessing their love to each other so soon. That could have really used more development. But it was cute and the smut wasn't all bad. It was a mildy entertaining read. Thanks for sharing!
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December 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
smutty. cute. cool. okay. CEDRIC AND HARRY ROMANCE ROCKSSSSSSS.
bye. Imperial 13
bye. Imperial 13