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for Haunting Memory

by WiseDraco

schedule November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nice! Me likes a lot! Thanks for offering to be a beta for me. I could definitely use some writing tips since I haven't written in 3.5 or so years (Clubbing Daze was my first attempt) and you write really well. I really enjoyed this Mascarade Theme you got going on. The "makin with the love" was really hot and sweet and made me feel all warm inside. I liked the end with the memory rotting your brain for eternity. What if Harry was in Slytherin? That would kill me for life!! I would have had the greatest love of my life slip away because I chose the WRONG HOUSE! OUCH!
schedule November 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I soooo want more!!! Continue!!!
schedule November 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I soooo want more!!! Continue!!!
schedule November 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!! Is this only a one shot? I'd love to see a sequel, something along the lines of Harry waking up alone, barely remembering the whispered I love you. Goes back to his wife, but nothing feels the same. So he searches for Draco. Or something like that. But anyway very good. You might want to look into getting a beta, and also with your html formatting, I noticed there was a lone i by itself and the a /i after a word. You want to put these things < > around the i so it looks like this < i > without the spaces however. same for this: < / i >. The other thing is Madame, you spelled it Madem, but in French it is spelled Madame, and English it is spelled Madam. Otherwise, very good!
person Amiyom
schedule November 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh! What a sad ending!

Great job!
schedule November 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this was fabulous!! please add another chapter!!