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I don't think Snape summoning a demon is DADA class is unbelievable at all since he was teaching them how dangerous they could be. Summoning a demon is definitely dark magics. He's right. They aren't children but young adults, some of whom actually fought against Voldemort and have faced death before. Hermione should have kept better control of her emotions, especially since Snape warned them not once but a few times not to speak to the demon. It's her own fault this happened. Not Snape's. Hermione is always over-reacting to something.

AND Minerva Mcgonagal is over-protective anyway. She probably wouldn't even have DADA if it were up to her. Sorry I'm just mad Snape got blamed for doing his job. Hermione knew that wasn't the real Snape to start with. She should have figured it was just trying to get her mad. I'm finished now.

I love Snape... but he did something VERY stupid this time (sorry gina XD) It is his fault.. a teacher IS ALWAYS responsable for what happens in HIS classroom. And Let's face it... 17 years old people ARE NOT COMPLETELY ADULTS... They are entering to be adults.. but still have so much to learn AND in Hermione's case her reaction was diferent cause her feellings were involved. No one else had her experience, for example in Harry's case he didn't saw Ginny but a woman he didn't knew. So if Severus screw it up... he must fix it... and let's remember that he ows Hermione u_u

"A threats, how i've missed them"...dies laughing....that was perfect!!!!

you keep making this better and better!!!!!!!!!!

Fascinating. I'm aware that you've put a lot of work into editing and reposting this piece, and it seems to have been worth it. You created some delightful original characters and have handled Severus' attachment to Lily with sensitivity and some original insight, regardless of invented history.

That said, I wonder if it might not serve your purpose (and do your story justice) to consider altering the presentation. It might take a bit of work, but the results may prove worthwhile, to consider this a two- (or three-, or four-, or...) part story. It strikes me that there is a clear delineation between the first arc of the story (Snape's turning and the subsequent adventure to regain his humanity) and the second (the consequences of "Book One's" events). It doesn't feel quite the same as the relationship between an original and a sequel, as the parts flow together so well, but posting "Book One" as a complete piece and treating "Book Two" as a WIP might attract readers who avoid WIP to Book One and get them hooked for Book Two; after all, the first part of the story's very little feeling and very much physical, and any true romantic is going to want to find out exactly how Severus and Hermione recover from their ordeals and get back to snogging.

Anyway. Just thought I'd, you know, review, share my thoughts, whatever...

Hey Shamandumb - Over two-thirds of the story has been about vampires. With your finely tuned talent for observation, I'd stay away from plot critiquing if I were you.

oh man.. that was tough.
the part where hermione said how unfair it was to leave him in the shack all alone,
how they had all mistreated them I got tears in my eyes. I'm not ashamed to admit that
I've cried rivers for the man when I read he died. it just wasn't fair, you know, just
like your hermione said and it touched me. thank fanfiction indeed, it gives some
kind of solace..

argh!!! "you're killing me smalls!" another chapter please

argh!!! "you're killing me smalls!" another chapter please